Reviews for "The Braided Heart"

Tue Nov 25, 2003 3:38 pm

I loved the flashbacks, and thank you for finally writing a past for Eowyn. I've wondered about her memories of her mother, and about her childhood. This is a soft look into those times, and a commentary on how her early years have influenced her. Very thoughtful and thought-provoking.

If you have any desire to polish this piece, you might want to focus on the transitions. Shfiting tense and pov at the same time is tricky, though I know it is useful for this plot/structure. However, the between-paragraph transitions should be overly smooth, to make up for the other shifts. In some cases, pronoun referents were lost: "...dirt-smudged knees. / They wave slowly to and fro..." That's the kind of thing that could be smoothed out in revision. It doesn't detract from the tone of the story, but a little massage at those spots would make this a really remarkable piece.

I enjoyed this piece a lot, and I really appreciate your treatment of Eowyn. Lovely.

Thu Nov 27, 2003 7:24 pm

I am a true Eowyn fan, Thevina, and I thank you deeply for a lovely story that makes her and her love to Faramir justice.

Thank you again, and keep on writing!

Fri Nov 28, 2003 12:32 pm

Hi Viv!
Thank you so very much! You have a point; it can get a bit awkward with both present/past tenses going back and forth, plus the time frame jumps somewhat. I'll look it over again and see what I can do to polish it.

Eowyn is a hero for me, but one with a definite personality. I am happy that you thought this was a meaningful glance into a possible background for her.

Fri Nov 28, 2003 12:34 pm

Dear Naran68,
Thank you for reading! Eowyn is a very complex character, and I enjoy writing about her very much. Soon I'll post my long story with much about a possible background for her which is a bit AU (she has friends, LOL!) but segues back into straight book-canon once she appears in TTT.

Many thanks for the review of this story!

Sat Nov 29, 2003 3:49 am

Lovely piece, I greatly enjoyed reading it Smile smiley face

Thank you!

Sun Nov 30, 2003 9:00 am

Wow, Thevina! I just loved this piece. The characterisations were all spot on, and the whole story was beautifully written. Well done! Very Happy smiley face

Tue Dec 02, 2003 12:15 pm

Thank you, BellemaineChercoeur, for reading it! I'm glad that you were pleased with it.

Tue Dec 02, 2003 12:19 pm

Well, hello EveningNightshade! Razz smiley face

I'm so glad that you liked The Braided Heart, and that you thought the characterizations were believable. I really enjoy writing about Eowyn and Merry's interactions; they are such unlikely friends, lots of fodder for stories.

Mon Dec 15, 2003 12:13 pm

Totally magnificent! I've never really enjoyed Eowyn's character up until now. I love the growing relationship between Faramir and Eowyn in this fanfic.

Fri Dec 26, 2003 7:11 pm

You officially have a new fan Smile smiley face

I'm off to read everything else you've written. I am really enjoying the backstory for Eowyn that you are developing and your style is very pleasant to read, clear, with enough detail but not an extra word to distract... Lovely!

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