Reviews for "Pay Off"
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Sulriel
Joined: 07 Jan 2004
Reviews: 327
Location: Imladris (or maybe Texas ...)
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Tue Dec 22, 2009 2:18 pm
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| This has a wonderful atmosphere that creeps up on you through the story as the woman makes her way through the store and on to her kill. Well done! |
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| Author's replied on Wed Dec 23, 2009 3:33 am |
Yay! Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm happy that you liked the story, and thank you tons for leaving a review.  |
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eiranae
Joined: 21 Mar 2006
Reviews: 116
Location: Just to the left of barmy.
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Wed Jan 27, 2010 8:33 pm
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| Wow! This story has amazing intensity. I love your prose. You have an amazing talent for blending detail into the action. The ending took me completely by surprise. It left me wanting to know more about the characters. Great job! |
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| Author's replied on Thu Jan 28, 2010 12:22 pm |
| Thank you muchly, Eira! I'm so so glad that you liked the story and that the ending worked Yay! Thanks for dropping in, reading and leaving a comment! |
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breemon
Joined: 23 Jan 2010
Reviews: 3
Location: A moonlit dew-kissed hill
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Thu Feb 04, 2010 2:59 pm
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Oh wow! This is nice. I particularly like the very last line. I feel as if with those words she's closing that chapter of her life(unlife?). I also liked how your use of similes to describe the setting at the beginning, that really pulled me in. The detail with the doorknob was great too. When she asks number eight's corpse which question she didn't answer, I could almost smell her blood. Oh, this piece is just delicious.  |
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| Author's replied on Fri Feb 05, 2010 3:40 am |
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm very happy that you liked this short fic -- my first original stuff in English I've ever posted anywhere, so yeah, I was kind of reluctant. Especially that the story itself isn't "nice". Your response gave me much confidence. Thank you!
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