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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
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Tue Jun 29, 2010 10:52 pm
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Hi. You did it again "g". Keep it up with updating so soon.
Dark chapter but so will be the next ones (unfortunately). I liked very much the way you describe the atac on Formenos and what came afterwards. A little nitpick (I hope you don't mind) : in Quenya Feanaro named Melkor Moringotto, later, in Sindarin became Morgoth. Anyway, it doesn't really matter. Beautiful writing. Looking forward to the next chapters. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Wed Jun 30, 2010 2:59 am |
Hi there! Glad you liked it, it was pretty charged to write. I'll do my best to update soon. . I don't mind the nitpick at all.  I knew some Quenya was bound to escape me... Well, Moringotto does not sound nowhere as harsh as Morgoth...so I suppose we'll just pretend we're all right with the Sindarin form. 0  Hope next updates don't disappoint you! |
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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
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Sat Jul 03, 2010 7:33 pm
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| Hi. Powerful chapter. I think you show very well Feanor's power, that power that made his sons swore that terrible oath and most of the Noldor follow him. Also, I like very much the description of the aftermath of the Darkening, the grief and numbness of the people. Beautiful writing. Looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Sat Jul 03, 2010 7:47 pm |
| Thank you! I am very glad you like it, it was very intense. I am hitching to write what comes next, events are on the fast track now...so I'll update soon. Hopefully. |
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Malinwen
Joined: 23 Dec 2005
Reviews: 168
Location: Ondolindë
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Sun Jul 04, 2010 1:49 am
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| It took me a while to get back here and read the two chapters you put up, but wow! Was it worth the wait. Amazing, it's all I can say; the description of the darkness, the madness, the Oath. Brilliant. Can't wait for more. |
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| Author's replied on Sun Jul 04, 2010 6:15 am |
| Thank you! I am very glad they didn't disappoint you. |
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Malinwen
Joined: 23 Dec 2005
Reviews: 168
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Wed Jul 07, 2010 1:42 am
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| Oh dear, and we come to the first kinslaying at last. You describe it brilliantly, captivating, with just a touch of the horror that the Elves surely felt. This is the time of their Doom. Lovely! Can't wait for more |
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| Author's replied on Wed Jul 07, 2010 5:44 am |
| Thank you! I was very worried about how it would come out; I am glad you liked it so well. |
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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
Reviews: 19
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Wed Jul 07, 2010 12:39 pm
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| Amazing writing. I'm glad that you didn't insist on the kinslaying too much, it's always hard for me to read about it, but what you wrote is very sad and heartbreaking. I am curious now to see how Silme will cross the sea, with Maitimo or with Artanis and her family. Looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Thu Jul 08, 2010 6:59 am |
| Thanks to you! Yes, I didn't like staying on the Slaying that much myself. Angst's all right...don't like the gore too much though. Hope next chapter won't disappoint you! I'll update asap. |
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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
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Sun Jul 11, 2010 9:14 pm
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| Hi. Surprising move on Silme's part, at least for me. You change a little what it is written in the Silmarillion regarding Feanaro's words to Maitimo and the burning of the ships but I liked it, it makes for an interesting turn of events. Now I am begining to wonder if you will ever have Maitimo and Silme wed. Splendid writing as always. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Jul 12, 2010 5:12 am |
| Thank you! Very glad you're liking it. I am trying not to copy and paste Tolkien's words too often...very glad you liked the variation. I'll update asap. |
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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
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Thu Jul 15, 2010 12:02 pm
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| Hi. I love the way you change the story told in the Silm. I'm very curious and eagerly awaiting the new chapters to see how your story will unfold. It's beautiful and heartbreaking, love it. And I'm still waiting for Findekano's reasons in his hate toward Silme "grin". Wonderful description of the crossing. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Thu Jul 15, 2010 4:56 pm |
Thanks to you! Another couple of chapters and Fino's behaviour should be pretty clear, worry not. Glad you enjoyed the crossing! It was tough to write.  |
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napali
Joined: 04 Apr 2008
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Tue Jul 20, 2010 11:32 am
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| Such a sad chapter, wonderful written but very sad. I'm looking forward now to read about the rescue, of some joy in Silme and Findekano's life. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Tue Jul 20, 2010 1:12 pm |
| Thank you! Very glad you liked it. Yes, it waa sad to go through. |
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napali
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Sun Jul 25, 2010 11:56 pm
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| Great chapter. I liked how Findekano convinced Silme to stay back and how, apparently, has accepted her presence in Maitimo's life. And I loved the arrival of the eagle. Looking forward to the new chapters. Thank you. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Jul 26, 2010 2:15 am |
| Thank you! When I talked about this chapter to my beta, for a moment she feared Silme was going to steal the rescue scene...no chance of that. Poor Fino! That's 'his' spotlight. Hope you keep enjoying! |
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Malinwen
Joined: 23 Dec 2005
Reviews: 168
Location: Ondolindë
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Sun Aug 01, 2010 2:47 pm
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| I fell slightly behind with this story due to travelling and holidays, but I finally caught up tonight! And what a delight to read further into the events we know from the Silmarillion and the HoME editions. So heart-gripping and woven with melancholy, but catching. If this were a book I couldn't put it down until the end. Bravo, I'm very much looking forward to more! |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 02, 2010 7:49 pm |
| Thank you! I am very glad you appreciate it so much. And how timely; I am about to update... |
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