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athena568
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Tue Feb 11, 2014 4:53 pm
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| Wow, I missed a chapter - and what a chapter. I love your characterization of Lady Ferveren and how you gently transition her from newly returned to a body and welcomed by the trees to someone more at ease and then finally to one who was most definitely Queen and Thranduil's wife. "My husband’s cousin would certainly be happy there and so, assuredly, would his wife. Whereas I think my own people would be happier amongst oak and chestnut – a forest with broad leaved deciduous trees, and some evergreens – my Lord Husband would feel happiest there!" I also like how you show the two elleth getting to know each other and have Tindome convey what has gone on while Ferveren was in the Halls. Nice work! |
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| Author's replied on Fri Feb 14, 2014 6:40 pm |
| Thank you. I'm really happy that you like Ferveren as a character and the way she takes a little time to get used to being alive again - it is so good to know when introducing someone like that works! |
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athena568
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Wed Feb 12, 2014 8:18 pm
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| A nice change to show us a peak from the Ithilrim - with Ithilienne and Legolas. I am waiting to see Legolas' reunion with his Naneth. So, Haldir and the Maiar danced around the fire too - and perhaps Lord Orome hunted with the Silvans in the ancient past - perhaps these traditions are related. A nice thought as everyone celebrates though they are in different parts of the world. |
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| Author's replied on Fri Feb 14, 2014 6:43 pm |
| I wasn't 100% sue the structure of this chapter would work - going through the day from place to place, person to person. I was happy with it when finished, after some discussion with my beta, but knowing it works for you, too, is good! Glad you think it interesting that the Silvan traditions may date back to the time before the Valar set off to The West, too. |
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Claribel
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Tue Feb 18, 2014 2:13 am
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| Somehow this chapter, for me, is one of the most beautiful you've written, and I felt very moved by it. I'm not sure I can explain why! I'm looking forward to learning more about Legolas' mother as a character. As always, I'm just so impressed by your story - what a wonderful and beautiful world you have created! |
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| Author's replied on Tue Feb 18, 2014 1:52 pm |
| Thank you so much - what lovely compliments, I am positively blushing. I am really so pleased that you like this chapter - and my version of Arda. |
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athena568
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Sat Apr 26, 2014 6:16 pm
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| Oh, now I am so looking forward to the meeting between Ferveren and Legolas! I'm sure that it will be a far different meeting that when Rumil met his long lost Mother. The Ferveren you weave seems ever inch a partner and love for Thranduil. It will be interesting to see how you develop the relationship between Mother and son - and how they will lead these people into new lands. I also love how you have developed the relationship between Haldir and Tindómë. Even so, I'm sure Tindómë is going to enjoy her reunion with Rumil. It has been a long journey apart. Great chapter! |
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| Author's replied on Sun Apr 27, 2014 10:56 am |
Thank you. Yes, I think Ferveren has managed to get past her last image of Legolas as little more than a toddler. I think this might have been part of Lord Námo's reason for choosing this way of returning for her as she will be needed to ensure their people settle into their new home. So she is likely to have a very different relationship with her son than Rumil has with his mother!
Rumil will doubtless be happy to see the deeper understanding between his brother and his wife - but not as happy as he will to simply have Tindómë back with him, I think. |
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Claribel
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 5:18 am
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| Another great chapter, even when you write a transition chapter they're full of little details and asides that make me think and make me laugh. As always I will be waiting impatiently for your next installment! |
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| Author's replied on Thu May 15, 2014 1:54 pm |
Thank you - I've been away on my holidays for 10 days but I'm back at the keyboard now  |
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athena568
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Wed May 28, 2014 8:56 pm
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| Your reunion between Ferveren and Legolas did not disappoint. "The Queen reached a hand out and touched Legolas’ cheek. Time seemed to pause before, overhead, a gull cried, breaking the moment, and none of the three observers could say, afterwards, whether Legolas had taken his mother into his arms, or Ferveren had taken her son into hers." Wonderful! I love how she is fascinated by her son - as well as by the sea. Its so amazing to be elves and to be reborn and reunited with loved ones. I think Legolas and his Mother will be a positive force of change for these lands. |
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| Author's replied on Thu May 29, 2014 5:33 pm |
| Thank you. I'm so pleased that you liked that reunion scene - and yes, I think that mother and son will be a great force for positive change, especially as they will soon know, from Haldir in particular, just what lands await their settlement. |
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Claribel
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Thu May 29, 2014 2:04 pm
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| What a lovely chapter. You have such a light touch with intense emotions and I am yet again in awe of your skill. I can visualise the horses on the beach so clearly, and loved the amusing asides about the smug eagle! Now I'm looking forward to them all catching up and seeing how Ferveren settles into her new life. |
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| Author's replied on Thu May 29, 2014 5:34 pm |
" You have such a light touch with intense emotions"
Thank you so much - what a lovely compliment. And I am also really pleased that you enjoy the asides, like the smug eagle! |
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Claribel
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Mon Jul 14, 2014 2:37 am
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| The end! I'm so sad! But as with every story you write, so much pleasure to be had in the detail and how it is that you convey your world so vividly. You write so well, I'm very envious of your skill. Lots of interesting pointers for future tales, so I do hope that you haven't finished with this world yet - as far as I'm concerned you can keep on going for quite some time! I'm particularly looking forward to the welcome Orome will give the woodland elves, that's a party I'd like to attend! |
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| Author's replied on Mon Jul 14, 2014 1:49 pm |
Thank you so much - and I don't think I'm finished with this world yet. Already I have a number of the characters saying 'I want to do ....' and 'I think I would like to...' and so on!
I will draw all those voices together and see how I can make sense of them over the next few weeks, then start the next story, I think. |
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athena568
Joined: 29 Nov 2007
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Thu Jul 17, 2014 6:00 pm
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| Feveren - definitely seems a popular Queen of Eryn Lasgalen! I can just imagine she, Legolas and their people founding their new home in the mountains! Something tells me that Haldir may visit them often - even if he remains more with Galadriel and the remainder of the elves from Lothlorien. As for the unusual interactions between Spike and Nelyafinwë Maitimo …. I guess you'll keep us waiting until the next story. I look forward to it. |
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| Author's replied on Fri Jul 18, 2014 3:14 pm |
I think she would be a compliment to Thranduil - and will also be one to Legolas, I think. Haldir wants to go adventuring - and doubtless will, although he will always be Galadriel's 'man' first and foremost.
As for Meadhros and Spike - that is certainly another story - which I certainly aim to write! |
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