Reviews for "Gondor's Grief"

Sat Feb 07, 2004 11:04 am

Nice job. I liked the image with the flower at the end. Maybe you could begin the poem with that flower, and then it could tie into the end. Just one criticism: in one stanza, you start off saying she doesn't know where he lies and you end saying that the sea is where he lies. That's a subtle contradiction you might want to clear up. Do write more Smile smiley face

Sat Feb 07, 2004 1:59 pm

Thanks for pointing that out, but she doesn't know the exact spot and the sea is a big place. That's what I was thinking. Also several miles down is not the same as a grave you can walk to and weep over. Will see if I can rephrase it though. Smile smiley face

Glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing.

Wed Apr 07, 2004 1:03 pm

It's a sad but good poem. Nice to see that Boromir was not a bachelor after all Wink smiley face

I loved don't panic and am now reading my way through your various stories and poems and I must say that with each story I like you more (doesn't if this is proper english but you got my meaning... I hope.)

Thu Jun 03, 2004 2:57 pm

Amazing - a bittersweet poem! A wonderful poem! Very Happy smiley face

Tue Nov 29, 2005 5:48 pm

I love it when things like this appear as the story of the day, calling attention to something in this case erroneously overlooked on my part. This is a very [bitter]sweet vision. She stands for all of us.

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