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JennnLee

Joined: 03 Nov 2003
Reviews: 28
Location: Orlando, FL
Sat Jan 17, 2004 4:42 pm
Interesting beginning, and refreshing in its honesty about things like smells. There were a couple of awkward places where the point of view jumped mid-paragraph, but otherwise you did a good job of indicating whose head we were in.
 
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boz4PM
Joined: 01 Dec 2003
Reviews: 38
Location: London, UK
Sat Jan 17, 2004 4:56 pm
Thanks JennnLee. Had spotted those bits you mention - think it's twice - as I was re-reading it again just now. Will fiddle about with them and see what I can do.

EDIT - Duly fiddled with and hopefully even clearer now. Thanks Very Happy smiley face
 

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SilverMoonLady

Joined: 14 Jul 2003
Reviews: 251
Location: Breaking in a Brandybuck... *wicked grin*
Sat Jan 17, 2004 5:41 pm
Love it!!!!!!!!!!!1 Smile smiley face Will review eloquently when not on duty! Gimme me more in the meantime!Smile smiley face
 
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Elentari

Joined: 13 May 2003
Reviews: 244
Location: Lost in elven dreams...
Sun Jan 18, 2004 10:46 am
Two words:
bloody hell.
ditto.
 
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Sun Jan 18, 2004 4:19 pm
Ba ha ha! very enjoyable - liked your 'false' beginning, like that Penny has no clue where she is, and that you pick a secondary character for her to meet. It's definately an anti-Sue. I'll look forward to more.
 
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Leilana
Joined: 19 Jan 2004
Reviews: 56
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Mon Jan 19, 2004 6:50 pm
impressive. beyond funny! im really glad this wasn't the type of story the false begining promised to be! i love how she reacts to everything...im pretty sure id do the same in every instance! keep it comin'!
Léilana
 
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Viv

Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
Mon Jan 19, 2004 11:51 pm
*snurf*... That opening sequence was classic! I love the many mentions of head rolling, and the fact that our heroine is in her PJs. And this description: "Mad as a bicycle. Very sweet but completely barking." Priceless. And leeches... oh nooooooo. Am giggling like a loon. This is so perfect.
 
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Liomi
Joined: 20 Jan 2004
Reviews: 3
Location: Imladris
Tue Jan 20, 2004 4:06 am
I must heartily agree with Viv, that "mad as a bicycle" bit cracked me up to no end!
Great realism, love the humor and I for sure can't wait to see what happens to Penny...and poor, poor Halbarad.
 
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boz4PM
Joined: 01 Dec 2003
Reviews: 38
Location: London, UK
Tue Jan 20, 2004 5:51 am
Wow! Shocked smiley face Thanks, guys. Very Happy smiley face *is speechless* Glad that people are enjoying this so far and finding the whole idea as funny as I do. (How funny it will remain I am not sure though.... wait till she gets to Bree... Ack! Twisted Evil smiley face ) And thank you Viv for coming up with this suggestion in the first place. So if it all goes horribly wrong and Halabarad loses it and kills her we can all blame you, right? Wink smiley face
 
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Silreth
Joined: 07 Jun 2003
Reviews: 15
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Wed Jan 21, 2004 12:00 pm
Great story! Update soon!
 
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