Reviews for "Trust To Hope"

Thu Jul 08, 2004 12:57 pm

I am thouroughly enjoying your story! I too like the character of Eomer, and felt both the films and books didn't have nearly enough of him. I haven't finished reading yet, but will. I just wanted to give you a quick thumbs up!

Thu Jul 08, 2004 8:58 pm

I can't believe it's over... I don't know whether to be sad or to be excited about another story. Anyway, good job and good luck.

Fri Jul 09, 2004 12:27 am

Suilad Novedhelion and Riyallyan,

Well I said I would go back and review each chapter. I have read the entire story and loved it! I am so looking forward to book 2. Previously I reviewed the prologue and chapter 1 so I will now comment on chapter 2.

I love the wolf, Elenion. Considering you have described Lothiriel as a woman very comfortable in the woods with the ability to speak Elvish, it is totally consistant she would have a wolf as a companion. The conversations she has with Elenion are the conversations I had with my dog, Che, when he was alive. Very open and intimate..the sharing of a special bond.

Loved the way you describe the forest they are in...at least it feels like a forest. Typical for men to underestimate a woman and I thoroughly enjoyed reading how she bested them in hand to hand combat. Go Lothiriel! Great chapter!

By the way, what does "mae atholen" and "mas led hiach" mean in elvish? You wrote these phrases in Elvish in chapter 1 but there was no translation for these terms.

Keep writing! I am assuming in the epilogue Eomer does not consider Lothiriel and he married until they have a Rohirric wedding. Right? Your epilogue was so frustrating in a way. Such a mind tease as someone else mentioned. After all the waiting and teasing... Head bang smiley face

Still I am grinning as I am writing this.

Wonderful story....I am hooked. Very Happy smiley face

Nan ablu.

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 1:52 am

Suilad Novedhelion and Riyallen,

Just re-read chapter 4. Great chapter. I love the dialogue between Eomer and Lothiriel. Great meeting of their minds, wits and spirits. The differences in their personalities really comes out. I also enjoyed Eomer's conversation with himself as he becomes aware of her and how he is trying to control himself while in her company. The line "God man, has it been that long?" was perfect. Smile smiley face

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One thing I did find distracting is that you have the translations of your elvish phrases and sentences at the end of the chapter. I was reading a post written by Moralanqua in the forum section of this site and he suggested the following format which would have the English translations in a different type of lettering right underneath the elvish phraes. By using the different style of lettering between the two, it was easy for the reader to know what was the elvish phrase that was part of the story and which was just the translation. It kind of went like this:

“Ir in aeair ah eryd dannar, a telim nan methed oer
When the seas and mountains fall, and we come to the end of days

Linnon i charthad uireb nin am meleth, Le cenithon 'nín elei nín.
I sing my eternal hope for love, I will see thou in my dreams.

A min elei nín ageveditham
And in my dreams we will meet again... "

The top sentence is the elvish written in the same style of lettering as the rest of the story and the English translation is in a different style of lettering. In this type of format the reader is not taken out of the story by having to go to the bottom of the story in order to read the translation and then find your way back to where you were. Just a suggestion...

By the way, I did find one spelliing error where the word "you bag " was written when it should have been "your bag".

Great chapter! Keep writing. Nan ablu.

Lothiriel of Rohan

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Fri Jul 09, 2004 1:58 am

By the way....I forgot to mention in my review above of chapter 4 that you had the words “Le delio. Aphado ammen.” in the story but at the bottom of the page had the following translation: "Le delio. Rado aphada le ammen - Hide! You must find a way to follow us". I know "le delio" means "Hide! "Aphado" means follow. But what does amen mean? Is it "follow me"?

Just curious....

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 12:03 pm

Hastu Novedhelion hal,

Just re-read chapter 5. Wonderful chapter! I love reading about Eomer and Lothiriel's arguments and fights, both verbal and physical. They are both strong and passionate people although Eomer's passion may be more controlled because of his military background. These two are doing a dance with each other...testing their strength of wills, opinions, physicality and convictions...a dance of love. It's electrifying! Argue smiley face

Enjoyed the interaction of Lothiriel and Handarion. We learn more of the life of the people of Rohan....particularly the women seeing their husbands and sons go to war or on patrol only to learn they have been killed defending and protecting their country and their people. For those left behind it must be heartbreaking when your father, son, child, friend and lover has died in these circumstances.

Just out of curiosity...what is a "hoyden"? I don't have a dictionary with me at the moment.

Great writing....love it!

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 2:01 pm

Just re-read chapter 6. I love the way you have developed Eomer and Lothiriel's relationship. Their characters are well-defined as they interact with each other. Yet their interest in each other develops over time. I have read a few fan fic stories about them where they are having sex right away. That is so out of character for them in my mind. Instead I see them taking some time to get to know one another which you have outlined beautifully.

Because of her title as Princess of Dol Amroth she would never have had the opportunity to meet much less get to know Eomer as Third Marshal of the Mark. Their paths may have crossed but her station would not allow her to interact in any meaningful way with a soldier in the military despite his rank. With this plot you have enabled them to know each other without the titles and despite the class system which would normally prevent their interaction. Brilliant! Very Happy smiley face

Great to have this image of a wolf traveling with the Rohirrim cavalry...Elenion is a wonderful character but I may have mentioned that before.

Lothiriel is endearing, even though a princess, finding common ground with soldiers like Handarion. Their growing friendship and interaction is so down to earth. Her kindness and his youthful exuberance a wonderful read.

The question you pose in Eomer's mind at the beginning of the chapter "Why did she insist at defying him at every turn?" sets up his frustration but also his fascination with this woman. His comparison of Lothiriel with his sister explains his ability to accept her as independent as she is so much like his sister, Eowyn. Eomer appears to be very observant and a great judge of character as he assesses the differences between Eowyn and Lothiriel. The smilarities and differences are an interesting mix of why he is not threatened by her and attracted to her at the same time.

Great character development....love this story.

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 3:17 pm

Re-read chapter 7. Wonderful description of Eomer and Lothiriel's feelings and touching....savored every word. So exciting! Oh yes!!! Very Happy smiley face

Eothain...a true soldier...just following orders Miss...and so amusing he would think to himself Lothiriel is wearing him out. Pray tell...a woman would ask questions and expect answers. LOL!

Lothiriel is charming in so many ways as well as wiley, cajoling and calculating. She has such a wonderful gift to get information out of people without threatening them as she cajoles stories out of Eothain about Eomer and his own life. While he realizes she is extracting information from him he might not otherwise reveal to her, he is enjoying her company and that is her gift.

Eothain is also a true friend as he watches Eomer fall in love and tries to advise and help him sort out his feelings.

Loved the drinking with the soldiers as Lothiriel entertains them. Great image in one's mind. Laughing and singing with them. Loved the songs as well......More! More! LOL!

Thoroughly enjoyed the kiss(es) and Lothiriel turning the tables on Eomer as she deflects his questioning. My...she is clever....and a real challenge. The dynamics between these two are wonderful!

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 4:51 pm

Suilad Novedhelion and Riyallan,

Chapter 8 is one of my favorite chapters in your story! It is so thrilling to read this battle with the wargs and about Lothiriel as she takes on a regiment of 100 or more wargs. My heart starts to pound as she shoots her arrows killing the wargs and orc riders. Her bravery and skill, despite her fear, without question.

Your description of the thoughts of both Eomer and Lothiriel at the beginning of this day is so wonderful...each wondering what the other is thinking. The death of Handarion was so moving and poignant. Gosh...I just cried. Ani's tenderness, care and concern so real and touching. Eomer, ever the friend and support of his men even in death says what every soldier would want to hear "Your father would have been proud". Still Handarion looks at Ani at the last moment before he dies....his friend and comfort. Gosh...I am in tears.

Eomer and Lothiriel are so much alike taking in sorrow and turning it into fury, anger and determination to kill those who took or injured their loved ones. They use their emotions as vindication and energy for greater deads to call upon their courage and defeat their foes. Huzzah!

Lothiriel's tendernes, spiritual nature, determination, courage and resolve come through in this story...a woman to be much admired...

At first I found it odd that the Rohirrim sang as they attacked their enemies. But then a friend of mine who is a veteran of past wars told me he had seen soldiers do just that to mask and overcome their fear. He also said it had an unnerving effect on your enemy in the battlefield. I imagine so...it would have been interesting to have seen this in the movies. Smile smiley face

By the way, there was no translation for the following terms in elvish: "Ada lye dartha. Bado na ron". I know ada means father but that is about as far as I got. Could you please tell us what these sentences mean in English. Smile smiley face

Again, this is one of my favorite chapters...so thrilling...got to re-read it again...Keep writing! Hannon le!

Lothiriel of Rohan

Fri Jul 09, 2004 4:56 pm

Chapter 8: Elvish: "Ada lye dartha. Bado na ron"....Hmmm translation...Your father waits? I have no idea how "bado non ron" would translate...????

Lothiriel of Rohan

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