Reviews for "Dance"

Fri Feb 06, 2004 9:13 am

A lovely vision. Was thrown by "throbbing," though, and the absense of punctuation, poetry not withstanding.

Fri Feb 06, 2004 10:01 am

Loved it. I can picture in my minds eye the scene

Sat Feb 07, 2004 10:55 am

Pretty poem. You might want to correct 'minstrels sings' as 'minstrels sing.' Sorry if I sound rude by pointing out grammar stuff like that. I don't mean to be rude, I just want to let you know about little things that you can easily improve upon. You created a nice atmosphere with this poem. The next step is giving it a clear emotion (you blended grief and joy, which confused me a bit) or adding a bit of a story, if you like.

Tue Feb 10, 2004 2:55 am

Actually I appreciate such frank comments. I tend to miss them. Thanks =)

Although actually... I meant it to have an s.

Sun May 02, 2004 1:01 pm

"The next step is giving it a clear emotion (you blended grief and joy, which confused me a bit) or adding a bit of a story, if you like."

I had no problem with the joy/grief line. The dance goes on no matter your emotional state. And as far as puntuation, I only use it if someone cannot see my point. Then I will try to make it clearer. But for the most part, I read poetry to see what I get out of it first and foremost. Then I look to see what the author meant.

Good job!

Tue Jul 06, 2004 5:32 am

I reread your poem. Moved me as much as before, but noticed a tense error. "danced we did under the moonlight" should read 'dance we did'. A small thing, but thought you would like to know. Still a wonderful vision. Thank you.

Tue Feb 01, 2005 7:09 am

Ok! Done for both Holly & Rous!

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