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Gaslight
Joined: 13 May 2003
Reviews: 17
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Wed Jun 11, 2003 9:21 am
I'm pretty ignorant when it comes to poetry, but I like straightforward stuff that doesn't get all wrapped up in metaphors. This one was very pretty, as well as being informative. Smile smiley face Heck, I appreciate anyone who can make stuff rhyme. Good work!
 
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LuthienTinuviel
Joined: 29 Dec 2003
Reviews: 312
Location: Dancing in the clouds.
Thu Feb 26, 2004 10:53 pm
Hrmmm.... there's no flow though it's rhyming structure is good. Good effort though!
 
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Rous

Joined: 20 Mar 2004
Reviews: 503
Location: Trying to stay below the radar
Tue Jul 20, 2004 6:09 am
The subject was good, but the meter was off kilter. There were some excellent lines, however, they were offset by the meter. I really believe that if you work on the flow and maybe some of your rhyming choices, this would be more readable. I know that sometimes just standing back and re-reading a piece, especially aloud, you can see where the weak spots are and then work on them. It works for me. This piece has great potential. It just needs some more effort.
 
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