Reviews for "Enlightenment"

Mon Mar 15, 2004 2:59 pm

I love the idea of this piece, and the resolution you've given it. The notion that a complete purge of desire is the thing that would save his soul is profound. I enjoyed this story a lot, and can see that the work you put into it was significant. However, there are quite a few grammar and spelling errors. Some occur at crucial points in the dialog, and things that are meant to be deep and meaningful draw an out-of-place chuckle. I think with a little basic language polish, this story would be incredibly moving.

Sat Apr 03, 2004 8:06 pm

Excellent (despite the few typos). *Loving* this meeting of the two worlds.

Thu Apr 15, 2004 2:49 pm

Very interesting, and very different. I must however second Viv's mention of the distracting typos. Would you like me to help you edit that? I would be happy to, since I really do think both your style and subject are exceedingly good. PM or email me if you want a hand Smile smiley face

SilverMoonLady

Mon May 10, 2004 11:19 am

Very original and well written. Your style of writing is great! Very touching and elegant. Very Happy smiley face

Wed Oct 13, 2004 1:39 pm

Typos seem to the bane of all storytellers.
The grammar can be fixed
this was a really good idea...well-cone

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