Reviews for "Of a Father and Son"

Thu Jun 12, 2003 9:03 am

Oh, how glad I am to see you post this here, especially since ff.net is giving us all fits. And chapter 16 is so exciting, I was boucing in my seat when I read about Haldir and his flaming arrows. Excellent chapter. -Ell

Thu Jun 12, 2003 7:18 pm

Your description of the understandable hesitation between humans and elves -- especially telerin elves -- was very believable and tense. Also, thank you for explaining that Legolas was not just wounded but poisoned! I enjoyed the battle scene at the beginning, too: unlike many fic writers, you resisted just glossing over the details. Kudos. Now onto the "constructive bits" (and note that constructive criticism from me does *not* mean I didn't enjoy the story: were I given the chance, I'd edit Shakespeare himself)... If I were an editor for this story, I might suggest your picking one or two point-of-view characters and staying inside their heads. It's a little confusing to be hearing Thranduil's thoughts then in the very next paragraph to be inside Letha's head. It doesn't detract from the story much, but it's something an editor would pick up on. Also, be careful of verbs: you use "to be" in all its many forms somewhat frequently. Other than that, you have a very charming fic going here. I an enoying it thoroughly!

Fri Jun 13, 2003 1:02 am

Thanks, Viv, for the constructive critism. I didn't realize I was over-using verbs. I appreciate your pointing that out. I'm glad for any comments like this that I get because this is the first thing I've written in about 12 years and I know I'm really rusty. Thanks again. Thanks also to Ellbee, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Thu Jul 10, 2003 5:29 am

Oh, what a nice surprise! I've been reading this at work, bit by bit when I get a chance, and I came back to it tonight, expecting to finish chapter 18, and what do I find? Another one. Thanks very much, sheraiah. I'm really enjoying this.

Keep it up.

do.

Fri Sep 05, 2003 5:32 pm

Continue, it's a good fic.

Lovely story, now go on and continue this story, I don't have the whole day. [ Just kidding ]

Bless you

Wed Sep 10, 2003 4:03 am

A grunt of pain confirmed his fear that the arrow had found its mark.
Sad smiley face

And you leave us with that?!

Wed Sep 10, 2003 2:54 pm

dolarabee said
> A grunt of pain confirmed his fear that the arrow had found its mark.
> Sad smiley face

> And you leave us with that?!

Well, I had to do one last cliffie. Twisted Evil smiley face

Tue Jan 27, 2004 10:46 am

“Come, Ada. I would introduce you to the remaining Fellowship.” He drew his father to the door of the study. “Oh, and Ada, please be polite to the dwarf. He is my friend.”

Sheraiah, that was-- wow-- absolutely fantastick. Fan-fu****g -tastic. A brilliant story, cannot believe it's your first after 12 years, but since you said that I have to believe.
Bravo. Wave smiley face

Sat Jan 29, 2005 12:45 pm

As a Thranduil lover, I can only (thoroughly) approve of any fanfic that doesn't present himas a moster/sadistic/constantly-drunk pig. I love the lighter, fatherly side the Elven King has in your stories. Go on writing... please?... (insert here dolarabee's cute avatar) Wink smiley face

Thu Aug 11, 2005 2:00 pm

I love the way Thranduil is portrayed in this as a decent person. And the relationship between father and son is great.

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