Reviews for "The Teacher"

Wed Mar 31, 2004 9:33 am

I can't believe I'm the first to review! I just wanted to tell you that it's a great story, though there are three things I want to point out. First, in the first chapter, you introduce the elves and in the battle you just mention "two elves", which we later find out are the two guards. You should probably mention their names. Secondly, when you say they're going to bathe, you say that Elrond went wtih his two sons following, though wasn't one supposed to stay and guard? That scene was a little confusing. Thirdly, when you mentioned that he groaned.... welll I thought that Elrond would have... more control? Well, here are some ideas, and you may want to talk to your beta about them. (if you don't have one, check the beta board)

Anyway, I find this story captivating and I can't wait for more! It's got a lot of potential and great cliff-hangers at the end of each chapter! Keep writing!
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Wed Mar 31, 2004 3:54 pm

SO GREAT! Keep writing! I suspected something like that... but her reaction.... this has got to be funny! Can't wait! Wink smiley face

Thu Apr 01, 2004 10:36 am

Very intresting... a spanking? lol.. Very Happy smiley face

Fri Apr 02, 2004 4:48 am

Interesting... who was that at the pool though?!? Anyway, it's got a good start.... Very Happy smiley face

Fri Apr 02, 2004 4:05 pm

going great! But who is he? Come on, give us a name? *puppy-eyes* please? Wink smiley face

Sun Apr 11, 2004 10:01 pm

Well first off let me apologize. I generally review if I like a tale. I went to see what was the last chapter I read, and there was no review. Sorry, could be gremlins or maybe I was just lazy that day so, Chapter 10 is were I am begining today. I like the tale so far. Generally, the characters are well developed, (except for 'him'). I like that Elrond is a gentle healer and that the the Penda is developing feeling of 'some sort'. It is sad about her past and her uncle's upcomming death. I was not pleased about the spanking, yet I understand that a)it was kinda the norm back then and b) Elrond does see her as still a child. What is your take on this? This has been awhile, so I may have it twisted in my memory. I like Glorfindel and the twins as well.
Please continue and thank you for your hard work,
Mina Sedth- Hisie Lome

Sun Apr 11, 2004 10:14 pm

Is Glorfindel the 'him'? Well the tension continues....thanks
Hisie Lome

Sun Apr 11, 2004 10:28 pm

Well, one thing about AU, it is just that. Elrond in a dally? LOL, I can see the eyebrow reaching sky high. That was fun.
Mina Sedth, Hisie Lome

Sun Apr 11, 2004 10:43 pm

What a wicked dream....

Sun Apr 11, 2004 11:00 pm

Well there seems to be tension all around. Great. I can't wait for more.
Mina Sedth, Hisie Lome

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