Reviews for "The Teacher"

Thu Apr 15, 2004 4:59 am

I'm back and I've just finished chp. 23! This is great and the story is developing well....... still curious about "him" however? Wink smiley face

A lot of well thought out tension.... Keep writing! Very Happy smiley face

Sat Apr 17, 2004 9:36 am

Elrond being uncomfortable by a little bit of icing? That is just wicked. Good take on the brothers sense of time, one month being short of nothing. Keep it up.
Mina Sedth, Hisie Lome

Mon Apr 19, 2004 6:18 pm

Who is this mysterious he...? It's not Glor, not Elrond and when they said "Elf-lord" in their thoughts... I doubt it's one of his sons...hmm... whoever he is, I already dislike him: "pay for her actions" that she didn't even do! Evil or Very Mad smiley face

HOW DARE HE??!!?? Anyway, I love your sense of humour.... like Hieie Lome mentioned, the icing was great! Keep writing! Very Happy smiley face

Fri Apr 23, 2004 10:05 am

Special council?!? They won't have time! He'll be dead by then! I'm gonna come and get him... *grinds teeth and yells* How dare he! That vile ....********************************************************!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm loathe him that *************************************!!!!! I enjoyed your descriptions and the story, even though one of your main characters will die due to me..... *grumbles* I don't care about the Kin-slaying - it's...it's.... something no elf would do! I expect it from a human, not an elf!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 Evil or Very Mad smiley face

Still, I enjoyed it, so keep writing! Very Happy smiley face

*grumbles* not how I feel.... Evil or Very Mad smiley face

Mona, your #1 fan!
Sister of the Oracle, Daughter of Hell
Prophet of Arda

Fri Apr 23, 2004 10:16 pm

Hi Mona & Hisie,
Just wanted to say that I am glad you are enjoying the story..WOW I can't believe I already have a number 1 fan..Mona, your last comments could not have come at a better time. I received a mesage from another reader on this site, who basically said that the story is no good, to mary-sueish and just not well written ...I seriously thought about just taking the story off this site...but after your comments, decided to keep it here..After all we are each entitled to our own opinion, I don't know why this person felt it necessary not to post their opinion where everyone could see it. Maybe she (he) was afraid it would be deleted, as there was nothing helpful about it, she said it was not meant to be a flammer, but it certainly sounded like one to me.. Thanks for reading the story, and I hope you continue to enjoy it...Ninde
Razz smiley face

Sat Apr 24, 2004 6:16 am

I'm so glad! Coward! It's wrong to take off your story, deprive us of happiness and satisfy a coward just because of an evil note! You should have reported it! You know, they read the stories (the people in charge) and if it's too mary-sueish, they gently ask you to remove it! So hah! Anyway, it was so cute the story! I mean, how he held her when she had nightmares.... And by the way, the problem in the woods happens to be *blush* me.... I couldn't wait...... I'm so mad at him! Just as another point, weren't the two guards brothers... maybe I don't remember well. Anyway, keep writing and don't let anyone discourage you!

Mona, your #1 fan
Sister of the Oracle, daughter of hell
Prophet of Arda

Sat Apr 24, 2004 8:21 pm

Hey, It is Hisie Lome on a new computer! (Don't know if it will show my name on review yet) I have not even read the update just yet....But, I got your note. If I don't care for a tale, I just "click" out... Some author has spent a great deal of time on their work. I is just plain rude to complain . I have discussed commas, tenses, and "grammar teacher" stuff with authors- yet only if it was a typo or they did not have a beta. And generally via personal email. I have had the joy of having many authors write me back explainiing any questions or just making comments. I love the anticipation of the next chapter. Please continue and don't allow a small minded person to direct your writing passions. There are MANY fan fic sites- but not all control the quality of the work. The higher ups at this site LIKE YOUR STUFF or you would not be here. Please continue to write.....you are just too naughty!

Thanks again,
Mina Sedth
Hisie Lome

Sat Apr 24, 2004 9:48 pm

Thanks for the words of encouragment Surprised smiley face

And dont worry, I have no intentions of stopping this story...And I agree, if you dont lke the story, then click out of it... Razz smiley face

I dont mind private emails, as long as they are constructive, one person who has been reading the story made a suggestion for a certain something to happen. I liked th idea so I shall write it into the story...anyway...look for more chappies in the next couple of days...Ninde

Sat Apr 24, 2004 11:02 pm

Boy am I glad your "mary sue" attempted to kick some elvish but instead of just swooning and someone said this was a weak character. What fun to finaly know who "he" was... I never guessed. Well, now for Imlandris. I like that Glorfindel is a flirt and the twins are respectful. It was kinda of doubtful from their behaviors in Bree if they would be. Well what unseemly behavior from an elf....must really be a sicko! I bet that said elf has quite a few extra bruise latter on. It was a nice touch that Penda still showed kindness towards the vilian and in the end he felt shame. But was it shame for his actions or for getting caught?

Otherwise, everyone seems to feel the tension coming from Elrond and Penda. This should get good.
Mina Sedth, Hisie Lome

Sun Apr 25, 2004 1:18 am

I just wanted to drop a line and say hello... Ninde. I wait anxiously for your updates during the week (and am I relieved the evil elf was no one I was particularly attached to!). I was not too enthused by it when I first read the summary, but then I clicked on it (Because I have a secret crush on Elrond). And I could not stop reading it.

And the person who said that Penda is too much of a mary sue... every character anyone writes is a mary sue (unless you are speaking of an orc or Sauron, but even they can be gary-stu's if the writer is not careful). You cannot tell me that Lord Tolkien did not insert himself into his roles, and I have seen many a literary piece describing just this issue. Just look at the elves... beautiful, do not know pestulence, death, wise, immortal. Everyone likes Galadriel (even Gimli)! Hello, if that person who told you your story was not good must not have even read the books, seen the movie et all.

To them I say: Rocket smiley face

You are doing a wonderful job on this story, and I do not know what I would do if you took it down! As a writer myself, I struggle with character development, and I believe that you are well on your way to having well rounded characters (well, that is after Elrond and Penda decide to stop fooling themselves and give into temptation and Amros is taken out back and beat).

Anyway, I guess this turned into more than a line.... Just keep writing!

Losille

P.S. Do not tell Haldir about that whole crush on Elrond thing! Fallen angel smiley face

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