Reviews for "Fallen"

Mon Jun 16, 2003 1:51 pm

An excellent story! I felt that this scene needed extending, and you've done it beautifully. *claps*

Wed Jun 18, 2003 7:42 pm

Thoughtful and well written. Well done.

Fri Jun 20, 2003 4:33 pm

First person present tense, for all it's grammatical simplicity, is probably the hardest way to write. You, however, do so very well. You only slipped into past-tense once ("He turned to leave, and I threw myself forward, my hands tangling in his cloak"), and that is easily fixable. My favorite line was toward the end, "They nod approvingly as I slip the mask of duty over my grief, and allow the demand of noble blood to straighten my shoulders." That is Eowyn in a nutshell. You've captured her entire history in that sentence; she evolves from that starting point. If I were editing, this piece, I might suggest that you revisit the last line. The chuckle seems a little odd; Gimli, after all, has seen more death in the last couple of months than he's probably ever known. All in all, a very well-written piece. Thank you for letting me peek into the mind of Eowyn.

Thu Jun 26, 2003 4:52 pm

You did an amazing work, seeing beyond the images of the movie, expressing those thoughts and feelings that all Eowyn lovers know were in her heart and her mind.

Wonderful writing, great pace. Thank you!

Mon Dec 29, 2003 10:16 am

That's was wonderful story, thank you.

I love how you pictured Legolas in your story, and Gimli for not judge the elf, from not say no word.

I love what I read.

Sivan Cool smiley face

Thu Mar 25, 2004 9:35 am

Excellent! Very nice, I love the way you fill in that little space around that little scene Smile smiley face

Even though as purist I don't care for the whole concept of that sidetrip, it was well done and your story adds to it beautifully! Very brave to use first person, it's hard to do, but you did it well! Very nice, want more more more!! Very Happy smiley face

Wed Feb 14, 2007 5:58 am

Another masterpiece. You write so well and so convincingly. Each story sould so well slot into it's correct place in the movie and fit perfectly. That takes talent and you have it in spades. Kudos to you, and keep writing please.

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