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aragorndreamer
Joined: 21 Apr 2004
Reviews: 24
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Fri Apr 23, 2004 4:18 pm
Awwwa how sweat!!!
 
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Moralanqua

Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 167
Location: Scotland
Fri Apr 23, 2004 5:56 pm
Few wee mistakes but overall a sweet and enjoyable poem. Smile smiley face

(BTW - is your net name Babysex?!!! Shocked smiley face )
 
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xBabySx3
Joined: 18 Apr 2004
Reviews: 3
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Wed Apr 28, 2004 2:50 pm
Moralanqua said
> Few wee mistakes but overall a sweet and enjoyable poem. Smile smiley face
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> (BTW - is your net name Babysex?!!! Shocked smiley face )

NOooo!! Its Baby-S for my name Shelby and x just for decoration Laughing smiley face
 
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Monaleoht
Joined: 02 Mar 2004
Reviews: 352
Location: I travel with the wind, as free as an eagle soaring the great firmament above Arda
Tue May 04, 2004 2:03 pm
Awww.... so cute!!!!!!! Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face

Bunny smiley face CUTE!!! Bunny smiley face
 
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HollyTook

Joined: 24 Jan 2004
Reviews: 36
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Thu May 06, 2004 8:52 pm
cute, but some errors that can easily be corrected.

~*Holly Took*~
 
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xBabySx3
Joined: 18 Apr 2004
Reviews: 3
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Wed May 26, 2004 8:04 pm
What can i correct to make it better guys??¿¿??¿¿

I dont really have that many days where i can write a good poem!!
 
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Andreth
Joined: 25 Oct 2003
Reviews: 107
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Sat Jul 10, 2004 12:44 pm
Since you asked, I'll tell you the errors I found when reading this -

The pronoun "I" is always capitalized

The first word of every sentence is always capitalized

"im" should be "I'm"

This - "to young children know"- should be - "two young children now"

Most of these mistakes could have been caught with a spellcheck or a thorough proofreading. If there are numerous mistakes, it's going to distract the reader from the the poem (or story). It's better to let them concentrate on the plot and the characters of the story, or the meaning of the poem. Which would be a good thing because this is a cute poem. Keep on writing! Very Happy smiley face
 

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Last edited by Andreth on Sun Dec 12, 2004 1:48 pm
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Rous

Joined: 20 Mar 2004
Reviews: 503
Location: Trying to stay below the radar
Wed Sep 08, 2004 5:48 am
A nice little fluff piece, but the grammar and spelling do distract. Your word processer program should have at least spell check (and maybe grammar check, but I can tell you from experience that it kicks up almost every line 'sentance fragment'. Very frustrating when writing poetry). If you do not have these tools (you may only have notepad or wordpad), then maybe someone could read it over for you. It would really add to the enjoyment of your poem. And it is enjoyable. Keep at it.
 
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