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Monaleoht
Joined: 02 Mar 2004
Reviews: 352
Location: I travel with the wind, as free as an eagle soaring the great firmament above Arda
Sat May 01, 2004 11:22 am
Beautiful! Elegant and well written! Great poetry. Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face
 
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HollyTook

Joined: 24 Jan 2004
Reviews: 36
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Thu May 06, 2004 8:41 pm
I like the final couplet very much. However, the 'cloud' line took a second to understand. It might be more powerful if you changed the line so it ends with 'bowed,' which you use later on anyway. I just think it's easier to work that word in, and it can have a greater impact than a cloud analogy. But, it's your choice.

~*Holly Took*~
 
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