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inglor
Joined: 26 Apr 2004
Reviews: 201
Location: Not here, not there, not anywhere
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Thu May 20, 2004 8:54 am
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Well done. You portray the characters very well. I like how you described her resignation. I also liked the irony of thier views of each other. A well hung Grima, nice twist.
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Elentari
Joined: 13 May 2003
Reviews: 244
Location: Lost in elven dreams...
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Thu May 20, 2004 1:12 pm
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That was unbelievably near the mark. A darn good description. and the end- holy cow.
*impressed* |
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ellisk
Joined: 24 Jan 2004
Reviews: 310
Location: Icon by Alassante! Wow!
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Fri May 21, 2004 4:57 am
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| Grima is a slime but you almost have me feeling sorry for him here. How sad (i.e. pathetic) are these lives. This is really a very well done story. It is impressive to see this topic done so well. |
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Monaleoht
Joined: 02 Mar 2004
Reviews: 352
Location: I travel with the wind, as free as an eagle soaring the great firmament above Arda
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Sat May 22, 2004 10:53 am
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Interesting and impressive... I feel pity for the girl.... *sighs*.. It would be interesting if you could write her story - how she became who she was...  |
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inglor
Joined: 26 Apr 2004
Reviews: 201
Location: Not here, not there, not anywhere
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Fri Nov 05, 2004 10:57 am
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After reading this again, I am impressed even more. How you have captured Grima's tortured soul, how he strives for recognition, how he relishes his small petty victories. I think your Grima is straight out of the book.
And how you captured the utter hopelessness of the girl, truly depressing. I actually pitied her and it made me think of others so down cast. I think your ending is superb in its realism
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Rozzan
Joined: 08 Aug 2005
Reviews: 17
Location: A shire in England, lying in leaves with Legolas
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Thu Aug 11, 2005 5:20 am
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Phew. Yet another of your stories that has brought me to tears. Grima so well written, perfect as always and my heart is bleeding for the girl, I found it hard to read it was so sad. But she is indeed exactly what he would use and all he could get, the touch of the plump common whore even rejecting him and then this abject broken creature taking him and asking so little money.
God this was tragic and disturbing but with such a ring of truth. As ever, so very much implied and shown within such short meaningful scenes. You have incredible talent for this. I love your writing. |
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NeumeIndil
Joined: 06 Jun 2005
Reviews: 156
Location: St. Louis, Missouri, USA
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Mon Nov 21, 2005 11:54 pm
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| Having read this before, I am pleased that my reaction has, if anything, intensified. I very much want to comfort the girl and in a strange way also comfort Grima. This reminds me very much of Le Miserables, or something equally dark, and the level of pity you've brought readers to is admirable in a small and well rounded piece. Nicely done. |
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RobinKa
Joined: 29 Mar 2005
Reviews: 1118
Location: Wherever I may roam
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Sat Dec 25, 2010 12:08 pm
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| This was dark, depressing, and very well written. Great job! |
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