Reviews for "Help Him"

Tue Jun 24, 2003 7:14 pm

First: *YES* a gollum piece. Second: I don't know much about poetry, but that read just beautifully. The pathos bombarded from all sides, and the last few lines were excruciating. I could *see* gollum looking up and seeing his own reflection in Frodo's face. The injustice was so obvious and compelling. Thank you for sharing this.

Tue Jun 24, 2003 7:44 pm

wowie .... great work! Expressive, touching, lovely and terribly sad ....

Thu Jun 26, 2003 11:20 pm

Thank you *very* much both of you! I posted this on several sites, and got very little feedback. But your reviews made me *very* happy! Very Happy smiley face

It's nice to know I'm not the only one who feels an intense amount of saddness for Smeagol, if I could, I'd go back to change the ending so that he goes home with Frodo and Sam. It angers me that not a single person tried to help him. (Frodo tried, but failed in the end) Very tragic indeed, I weep for him. Crying or Very sad smiley face

Thanks again for the reviews! Very Happy smiley face

Tue Jul 01, 2003 10:02 pm

Oh my god

, that was wonderful! Poor Smeagol. I kept hearing that haunting music from Two Towers when I read this and know that I'm not going to be able to watch Return of the King without thinking about your words. Poor Smeagol, someone should have tried to help him...

Tue Jul 01, 2003 11:49 pm

Thanks Scribe, I'm going to have a very difficult time watching ROTK as well. Glad to know I'm not alone... Sad smiley face

Mon Feb 09, 2004 10:06 pm

Interesting style. A lot of lines seemed a bit choppy to me, though. You might want to either lengthen your lines so they don't seem too abrupt, or you could extend one sentence over several lines so it flows better. That will also give you an oppertunity to articulate more creatively. The line, "You are let go" seemed awkward to me. But I must say, the last stanza was amazing. Right on!

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