Reviews for "The Swan and the Stallion: The Tale of Éomer and Lothíriel"

Sun May 30, 2004 8:32 pm

OMG, you do not know how excited I was when I saw the title of this story! Fanfiction involving Rohirrim is always my favorite, and I've wanted to see a story about this topic for quite a while now! In my opinion, your writing is elegant, and I can see everything happening in front of me. There were just a couple of things that I noticed (wording of some things) that seemed akward to me, but I can't remember what they were right now!

Please, keep writing, and I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

Mon May 31, 2004 9:16 am

Very nice! Well written, the words seem to flow across the page! Perhaps the descriptions were a little to long, but a good chapter. My advice: don't take to long to get to ... where-ever the "real" plot is. I loved the title- my second favourite pairing of all time! Please update soon! Very Happy smiley face

Mon May 31, 2004 10:20 am

Oooooh I was so thrilled to see you're story. Like Taethowen I love almost ANY story that involves the Rohirrim!!! I really enjoyed reading this chapter, I noticed a few things... (theses, ? instead of '... ) but it was still really good. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Mon May 31, 2004 12:41 pm

Yes, I like the start of this, it had promise and I hope to see another chapter soon. I am also a big Rohirrim fan, especially Eomer/Lothiriel stories. Eokat. Very Happy smiley face

Mon May 31, 2004 2:50 pm

Your story is off to a great start! Already you have devoted fans!

Mon May 31, 2004 4:26 pm

Off to a nice start...can't wait to see where this goes. I love Éomer and Lothíriel fics and I'm glad to see more people are taking an interest in something OTHER than elves! One small thing though...Corsets were not used in Middle Earth - if Tolkien intended this time period to be roughly "medieval", then it was far before the invention of corsets, which did not come into popular use until the early 1800's. However, if you are taking artistic license, then go for it, by all means, especially if it has some meaning later in your story.

After all, I had to "create" a passage through the White Mountains for mine....

Looking forward to more!

Very Happy smiley face

Tue Jun 01, 2004 8:41 pm

"This day was not going to be like yesterday."

Thank you for writing a decent opening line. If you hear applause in the background, that's just me. Wink smiley face

This was a fine opening chapter, and I look forward to reading updates. Lothiriel seems a pleasant person, somebody I wouldn't mind getting to know. Just one thing: What happened yesterday that makes this much-different one so much better? Or worse? After that opening line, I was expecting to get that information -- if nothing else -- from this chpater. Instead, the chapter contained a lot of nice things, a fairly dull day, and several interesting characters. But nothing spectacular. If you were looking for a jumping off place for chapter 2, that might be a good one. Wink smiley face

Sat Jun 12, 2004 11:33 pm

I thoroughly enjoyed your first chapter very much. The characters are nicely done and it all has the feel of being possible and real. There's only one, small problem I'd like to mention...

I can't seem to find Chapter Two... Wink smiley face

Which will be posted... when? Smile smiley face

Sun Jun 13, 2004 10:05 am

I was visiting my sister for a week so sorry for the late review.
I LOVE character introspection. You have written a wonderful chapter for Lothiriel. Are you going to stay with her point of view or also explore Eomer's inner thoughts? Either way I am looking forward to reading more!

Sun Jun 13, 2004 4:05 pm

are we ever going to see an update for this one>? You've got a really really really good start

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