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Monaleoht
Joined: 02 Mar 2004
Reviews: 352
Location: I travel with the wind, as free as an eagle soaring the great firmament above Arda
Sat Jun 05, 2004 8:32 am
I loved it! Wave smiley face You may want to go back over the story for some typos - such as in the last sentence, but it was a lovely story! Well written and elegant, you made it seem so realistic! Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face Very Happy smiley face
 
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Sat Jun 05, 2004 9:08 am
Eowyn and Halbarad! How wonderful of you to see their similarities and draw them for us here.
 
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Vilwarin

Joined: 01 Jun 2004
Reviews: 23
Location: Annúminas
Sat Jun 05, 2004 9:08 am
Hu, thank you.

Since english is not my native tongue it is not easy to write a gramatically perfect story.
Thus, critique is very appreciated.
I have gone over the story again and made some tiny changes.
 
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SilverMoonLady

Joined: 14 Jul 2003
Reviews: 251
Location: Breaking in a Brandybuck... *wicked grin*
Sat Jun 05, 2004 10:01 pm
Lovely! I would not have know you were not a native speaker if you hadn't said so. This was a really neat pairing and a very well written piece. The implication that he rode to Gondor knowing he would die is very powerful, especially when set against his prediction of her future happiness. I also liked the way you pinpointed the fact that she loves an idea and an end, not the man; a very important point, well statedSmile smiley face

I'll be watching for more!
 
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Rous

Joined: 20 Mar 2004
Reviews: 503
Location: Trying to stay below the radar
Thu Jun 10, 2004 6:01 am
Not too shabby. I liked the premise. I must have read after your typo changes. I only found a couple of tense errors.
"But we have sworn an oath of protection over a thousand years ago and we do not intend to break it. " is the only glaring one that caught my attention. Should read "But we swore an oath..."
Otherwise, well written. Please do not stop. I cannot even imagine how hard it is to write in a language that is not your primary tongue. We speak a lot of Spanglish in our house, but English is still the main language. My hat goes off to all the authors with English as a second language.
Rous
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GypsieRose

Joined: 09 Jul 2003
Reviews: 45
Location: Illinois, USA
Thu Jun 10, 2004 12:38 pm
Now, there's a pair I wouldn't have thought of. Very interesting idea, and nicely done! I like the way you characterized Halbarad.

--Rose
 
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Hanasian

Joined: 06 Sep 2010
Reviews: 24
Location: Somewhere in Eriador
Fri Sep 15, 2017 10:14 pm
Wat a well written exchange between Eowyn and Halbarad!
I know I'm about 13 years too late, but thought I'd say that I enjoyed your writing very much!
 
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