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SilverMoonLady
Joined: 14 Jul 2003
Reviews: 251
Location: Breaking in a Brandybuck... *wicked grin*
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Sat Jun 05, 2004 9:53 pm
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| Oh wow! Very very very well done! As always, your images shine clear through the words; I can see them walking that corridor, passing through shadow and light. This is an excellent piece of dialogue that stands true to the characters and their later actions. This is going on my recommend list. |
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Mitasova
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 13
Location: Russia
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Mon Jun 07, 2004 3:23 pm
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Ow, wow! I log in the OSA the first time in about a fourthnight, and what do I see? Nancy's new fic! With Boromir! And Grima to boot! I think this is a very captivating piece, and you managed to express the inner tnsion with dialogue perfectly well (although, in the narrator's speech you sometimes overuse adjectives, imo. And a sentence structure is a tad, I don't know, fractured? in places, at least for a Tolkienesque work.) But the essence of an encounter is caught wonderfully, and I love Grima's sleazy ways.
Thank you.
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Tanya
ETA: I submitted review then realised that I've begun it with almost the same exclamation as SilverMoonLady. You should be proud of inspiring this kind of reaction. |
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Anna
Joined: 29 Jan 2004
Reviews: 108
Location: Sweden
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Thu Jun 10, 2004 1:33 pm
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Brilliant! The language is absolutely wonderful. I love the way you use the contrast between darkness and light. Everything is so beautifully described, which makes me feel like I´m there, lurking in the shadows. You have a way of making it all feel 'real'.
Both Boromir and Gríma are perfect! You make me hear their voices when I read. Very true to character!
Your way of avoiding 'he said.....he said' turned out just fine, I think. I actually didn´t notice until I read it in the end, which is good, imo. If I had noticed it right away, it would´ve meant I was bothered by it.
Oh, and "his pale face lit with false brightness" is an absolutely outstanding line!
Thank you! |
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Monaleoht
Joined: 02 Mar 2004
Reviews: 352
Location: I travel with the wind, as free as an eagle soaring the great firmament above Arda
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Sat Jun 12, 2004 12:10 pm
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Wonderful! A little confusing at times, but excellently written!  |
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Yavanie
Joined: 02 Jun 2004
Reviews: 122
Location: Texas
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Sun Jun 13, 2004 2:08 pm
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What a delight to read so short a work so well crafted! I , too, felt like I was walking the corridor through shadow and light as you so well conveyed the imagery and the contrast between the characters. True to Tolkien, your Grima made my skin crawl! Grima the vulture! what an apt description!
Bravo!
Yavanie |
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