Reviews by Yavanie

Paradox of the Fourth Age · Mon Nov 07, 2005 3:14 pm

Okay, I finally get a chance to catch up on your story. I just love Laureanna! At one moment she is so unsure of herself, frightened and intimidated, but when it counts she steps up and succeeds. Then her treatment of Elrohir, he SO deserved it, and her! May I also commend you on your skills as a writer. this tale is even more readable than your previous works and you know how much I enjoyed them. Oh yes, more please!

Boats to Build · Fri Oct 28, 2005 9:37 am

Well, as if I could possibly topped what's been said. I can just agree wholeheartedly with the attention to detail. As Ghetto said, not a word wasted and yet no description left lacking! So much depth in so short a space. A delight to read. I really felt like I was sitting on the beach with them. All of you people in this story are so "real". Not just the main characters, but the minor ones merely mentioned are given depth by what is revealed about them. Bravo!

The Elf and Future King · Thu Oct 27, 2005 1:54 pm

Wow! I finally got to catch up on the last three chapters! Yeah, if I were in her shoes, don't think I could keep my hands off that horse lord either! As always, couldn't stop reading, just had to see what was going to happen next - and then get left hanging! Well missy, the next chapter better be in beta!!!! I can't decide who my favorite character is. I can so identify with many of Amrun's feelings but Thengel is just precious!!!!!

Paradox of the Fourth Age · Sun Jul 31, 2005 4:46 pm

I'll have you know I sniffled my way through the whole chapter!!!! And what ellisk said, one slim band of gold!!! Beautiful!!! And now for the rest of the story.....(please?!).

The Heart of Lamedon · Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:04 pm

OH What a treat!!! A little known character and another hidden hero gem buried in the Tolkien texts!!!

Beautifully evocative, I could sense his emotions right away, and "this eagle of a man" oh what a way to describe Aragorn, so much encompassed in so few words. You are the drabble queen. Thanks bunches for this treat. And kudos also to the follow up that helps place it in context. Very insightful and will drive those that aren't familiar with the passage to seek it out!!!

The Elf and Future King · Tue Jul 26, 2005 8:15 pm

okay, no fair!!! cliffhangar. Throw caution to the wind already!! why is it that all around them can see the inevitable, even the child, but them??? Eomer quite wasting the time you have with them!!!!!

Surrender · Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:01 pm

I like the way you show the playfullness between Celebrian and Elrond from her statement about him fearing his mother-in-law to the interplay between them before the halls of fire. The way you portray Cirdan is also delightful, the sound of his voice to his gentle jest at Galadriel. The exchange between Galadriel and Glorfidel was such an enexpected glimpse at their own stories. And as always, your descriptions of the fireflies and images of he halls, just delightful. Looking forward to more.

Aftermath · Sat Jun 25, 2005 6:30 pm

Okay, wow hardly seems adequate. The description of the battle scene through Haldir's eyes, was just so evocative. I could see in my mind's eye the lifeless skull and sense his questioning and doubts trying not to think of those that had so recently perished. His thoughtfulness in the intitial encounter with the lost girl was also easy to imagine the way you wrote it. The physical encounter, with hardly a word, was well done. Then the lost, was that a dream feeling upon his awakening to find her gone. The meeting with Celeborn, well done, and the longing for home. Just Wow, again. Bow smiley face

What Better Companion? · Fri Jun 24, 2005 4:13 pm

Wow, where to start? That was such a tantalizing taste of Valinor and such a candid moment in Glorfinde's reembodied life there. The encounter with Olorin is so, so, well just right.

The bit about him not having scars and reflecting on the eldar having scars because of their fea not wanting to let go the incident was truly inspired. Great bit of introspection.

Your descriptions of nature, the birds, insects, the sunlight and the passage of time in Valinor, well, I could almost taste the air myself. You write the most beautiful imagery, without overdoing, a delicate balance and well done.
"Insects buzzed around the Elda’s ears,.... Perhaps they knew the answers ..., if only he could delay them long enough to ask."
okay, that has to be one of my favorite lines, though it was hard to choose.

The way you described Olorin taking form, filling that outline "slickly and naturally", was a great image, likewise the description of his physical form, the "roseate tinge about the cheeks, his grey eyes seemed to hold the memories of a million years" so evocative of the movie Gandalf so familiar to all and the mysterious secrets he keeps as one of the Maia.

Then there was: "We each resonate in tune with the melodies of the world. If we are out of step, the chords jar and jangle until we shift and shuffle. If we are on the right path, it is as though our bodies too are singing, and all feels well."
If that just doesn't sum up how to know if you living the life you are supposed to, then I don't know what does. Wisdom for any age there.

okay a really long review, and I can hardly add a thing to those who have reviewed before me. An excellent piece. Thank you for sharing.

Surrender · Wed Jun 22, 2005 11:20 am

WOW! what can I say? Okay I'll start with the first two paragraphs of your descriptions of the Imladris and sunrise: stunning. I could really see it. I just love the detail you weave into your stories. It's as if I can see it, feel it, almost taste it.

Like Elrond, for a moment I thought you were painting a "dark Galadriel" or evil mother in law. But then, like Elrond, when I really thought about it, and her gift of foresight (like his, but farther reaching) then I was sure it wasn't what it appeared to be. A well set stage.

Nice resolution to the chapter: an intimate moment with father and daughter. And then the self reflection of his own life. A very well set contrast.

Kudos my dear, another lovely addition to the tale. Looking forward to more.

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