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Two Halves (G)
by LilyFrost.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [4]
Wed Jul 28, 2004 1:05 pm
One small canon note... Elves are physically stronger than humans, so while the human half of their geneology may give them an extra "fire", it would not make them "stronger" than their fully elven counterparts. Your first paragraph states (paraphrasing here) that they are both broader shouldered and stronger than other elves.

Other than that tiny bit, I thought it was well done. OK. One other thing: maybe you could make the ending stronger... It seems to turn warm and fuzzy a bit too quickly (?) just an opinion