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Shameless Revisited (NC-17)
by BlackTraitor.
Chapters [3]
Reviews [3]
Warnings [non-cons,violence, graphic sex]
Thu Dec 23, 2004 9:45 pm
sindohte said
> Welcome to Open Scrolls. Given that there are not many Istari fics, I decided to give your story a try. You have a clear, engaging writing style, which is a definite strength. However, I wish that there could have been a bit more character development with the OFC. Certainly you do not and should not give the plot away to the reader, but just a little more insight into why the OFC would search out Saruman would be helpful. And a final note, while Natasha is indeed a beautiful name it struck me as being undecidedly Rohirric, given that it is Russian in origin.


Hi! thanks for reading my story!

I have come to that conclusion as well about the name *I just always liked it* - I have named her Jahi- it is a female spirit who is given to pursuing evil- also- *** the main premise for the lady is given in the original Shameless- but even there I could certainly give her more background! Thanks so much for the helpful and polite review! ^_^