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I Will Catch You (PG-13)
by kika988.
Chapters [25]
Reviews [31]
Sun Oct 23, 2005 3:09 pm
I really liked the plot, but I thought some of the dialogue was very cliched and could have been done more originally. I found myself scanning through a lot of the paragraphs. If you could cut down on all of the unneccessary parts/words, I think this story would really improve. Smile smiley face
 
 
Cross Wife off the List (PG-13)
by LadyBluejay.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [8]
Warnings [None]
Fri Jul 01, 2005 2:51 pm
Love it.
 
 
A Betrothal And Wedding (PG)
by isilelensar.
Chapters [2]
Reviews [3]
Warnings [none]
Fri Jul 01, 2005 2:04 pm
Um, I was kind of bored. I read somewhere that if you can cut 10% out of your story and it still sounds good, then you're better off; it definitely struck me as too wordy. Good plot though.
 
 
"Uh-Oh" (G)
by Shanalir.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [10]
Warnings [None]
Fri Jul 01, 2005 1:45 pm
Good wording, and interesting that you're dropping males into ME (as opposed to two drop-dead gorgeous females who just happened to take a walk in those lovely woods out back a day after getting a perm and a manicure...) still, you'll need to work hard to avoid those traps we call cliches. I'll be checking in!