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Butterfly- Chrysalis (G)
by Rous.
Chapters [15]
Reviews [25]
Warnings [None]
Sun Jan 29, 2006 2:31 pm
I must say it is just as enjoyable as the first, but your writing style has certainly mellowed in this story. I am quite happy to see that whoever betaed this stroy got the spelling correct! There are not quite so many insults this time, and few cute pictures like cute orcs and lullaby singing Haldir. I am anxious for the next chapters. Ela is a hook....a drug! You have gotten me addicted to a fictional character! Just as bad as Tess Gerritson, you are.
 
 
Butterfly-Cocoon (PG)
by Rous.
Chapters [22]
Reviews [72]
Warnings [Pretty much G-PG for violence]
Sat Jan 28, 2006 11:30 pm
I have read through chapter ten. I would read it all tonight, but my husband is getting anxious for my company, as it is 11:30 pm here. So far, I love it, but I do have some notes I wopuld like to write.
In chapter 2 it says in one sentence that she is ten. In the next, it says six. Is this a typo? Also, the story is good, but confusing as hell up to this point.
Chapter 4: I can only just imagine Haldir singing lullabyes. And cute orcs? How picturesque! I have noticed throughout this chapter that sell (a nickname, I believe) has become Iell. Is there a reason behind this? Caldelen is definitely a cad, and I do not mean of the computer assisted drafting program, either.
You drop hints all throughout the story so casually. I like that in a story. It is a good hook. You also have such tactfully written insults. I really enjoyed them all.
Chapter six had the hideous ending of They're Dying! I loved it.
In chapter 7, I have realized that men always go for the unattainable. Is it a game with them? Also, I belive I have found a typo: When Ela is meeting Mares, she says "Lady is for someone who DOES inhabit treehouses..." I am thinking it was supposed to be doesn't.

All in all, up to chapter ten it is awesome. If all your stories are like this, I would love to beta for you if you are ever in the market for one.
 
 
Choices (NC-17)
by mel.
Chapters [11]
Reviews [11]
Warnings [Adult situations; angst]
Fri Jan 27, 2006 7:24 pm
Ah, yes....I finally got time to finish and I must say, I quite enjoyed it. The only thing that irked me (and it irks me with any story, not just yours) was certain spelling errors! I am a grammar freak! Even with my poetry, if it isn't correct, I won't show anyone until I have fixed it. The content of the story was wonderful, and I like how you had it as a mixed-view story, but the spelling! SORRY! I can't help it. I think I'll go away now....
 
 
Choices (NC-17)
by mel.
Chapters [11]
Reviews [11]
Warnings [Adult situations; angst]
Thu Jan 26, 2006 1:43 pm
I've only had the cahnce to read up to Chapter 3, but, I can't wait for time to finish. Its good so far! I think of stories like these all the time, but can't seem to translate them to written words, you on the other hand do a great job. Very Happy smiley face