Reviews by KhazarKhum

Love mé Broughté · Mon May 02, 2005 5:40 am

This is really well done! I wish I knew the tune it was supposed to go with--I feel like I'm missing half the fun by not knowing. Smile smiley face

It is wonderful. Keep up the good work!

Not to Share · Wed Apr 20, 2005 12:50 am

Fine, poignant little vignette. In a society that treasures children as much as theirs, this would be the ultimate failing.

Pen-Nîn Tithen · Wed Mar 16, 2005 4:36 am

Arwen is beautifully rendered; her worries are quite real and heartfelt. At times the lyricism of the story reaches poetic heights.

Most Royal families do (or did) permit their children some familiarity with the servants', both to allow the children some extra playmates and to permit them some freedom from the stiff etiquette required in court. Allowing eldarion to do so would be in keeping with most Royal behavior.

The Cursed Queen of Angmar · Thu Mar 03, 2005 11:07 pm

Thank you to everyone who has written and made so many kind & wonderful comments.

AranelMinyatur asked what would have happened if she were really in a "sleep" spell. Well, she would still be in that spell, now and forever, because WK isn't there to break it for her. I don't think she would like being awakened by someone else, and waking up to find her world completely destroyed would probably be too much for her.

Long ago, one of the best writing teachers ever told me "never be cruel to your characters". I think that would apply here. I'm too much of a romantic to do that to them. Her grave should remain undisturbed, and her spirit free.

Repose Earned, Words Unspoken · Fri Feb 25, 2005 7:57 pm

Excellent Denethor; his voice is rarely heard in any form except that of the scolding madman.

The poem fragments fit so beautifully that I was surprized to learn that they were not written expressly for this piece.

What animals! · Tue Feb 01, 2005 2:51 pm

It's certainly cute. It would be easier to read if there were breaks between the lines, though--right now it's a "wall of white" and that can be tough on the ol' eyes.

Never thought of Elrond as a cat person. I guess I thought the elves just asked the mice to stay away. Wink smiley face

And in the Darkness Bind Them: Vol I · Sat Jan 29, 2005 9:54 pm

A few comments.

Doesn't anyone notice his odd coloring? I would think that the gossip would be all over the place about the lord's "Ghost Childe" (a nice medieval description). I can't believe that albinos would be so common that no one at the Inn, or the merchant trader, or anyone else who saw him wouldn't have a good idea who this was.

I wish there was a clearer description of the stick thing. It souinds like a nice, creepy critter; but all I seem to visualize is Jack Skellington naked. Shocked smiley face

I would love to beat the beejeezus out of his mother & aunt. His dad is too weak & ineffectual to ever amount to much; that's beautifully rendered, BTW. And he's torn between his frigid bitch of a wife & his innocent son.

What happens to Harilmor's son? The poor kid is definitely going to need some counselling.

Laughing smiley face

The Cursed Queen of Angmar · Wed Jan 26, 2005 4:00 am

Wow! Thank you! *blush*

It is entirely due to Ariashal, you understand; she's very demanding, and wants the whole thing done her way. The easiest way to come to a crashing halt is tell her NO, which means she goes on strike until I see the error of my ways. Smile smiley face

The Trees Remember · Wed Jan 12, 2005 8:31 pm

A few minor glitches really threw me: Jeremiah's sudden POV shift , and the apparent lack of time between Elaine's actions, are the ones that really need attention. The time issue can be handled by some breaks.

A second issue: Why are the Elves in America?? Is North America part of Beleriand resurfaced? Or did they come to escape the growing industrialization of Europe? Did they find kin in the great forests of America?

As for the Holocaust: In 1942, the number of people who actually knew what was going on was far more limited than we might want to think. Unless Thranduil is on an Intelligence Committee, he might not know anything at all. But--why the heck does Thranduil care? He never liked Men. Why does he care what happens to some Men in a far-off place? Did the Jews and Gypsies once shelter & aid Elves? Is that what drives him?

Thranduil's new role is excellent. I think he'd also love the redwoods, some of which would know Elves from their youth.

You've raised a number of intriguing questions, but now you need to answer them.

Fell Beast · Fri Jan 07, 2005 7:07 pm

Awwwww.....Khamul's a mommy! Smile smiley face

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