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The Oath (G)
by Karine.
Chapters [2]
Reviews [4]
Sun Aug 08, 2004 2:59 pm
I, too, liked the story. Good idea and plot conception. Your writing style moves the events along and is not choppy in any way. On a technical note, I agree with KhazarKhum in that you should get yourself a beta reader. There's some punctuation and grammatical errors, but these are easy enough to fix. Plot and character relationships are always the hardest to tackle in a story (at least they are for me!), and you've handled it nicely. I also think you should continue the story. I say a good effort.