Reviews for "Vales of Sorrow"

Tue Jun 22, 2004 11:49 pm

Ooh! 1st review!
Anyway, excellent start! I can't wait to see what happens next. Hopefully there will be more background on the teacher.
Update soon!
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~LadySolaris~

Wed Jun 23, 2004 11:42 am

Beautiful! Poor her - I hope she gets better soon! A wonderful story - please, please update Soon smiley face

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Wed Jun 23, 2004 7:45 pm

Very interesting! A mystery elleth, who only speaks Westron and has lived in disguise, for countless years, among humans... I'm hooked! I can't wait to find out what happens in your new installment, hopefully, I won't have to wait too long Very Happy smiley face

Update soon, I can't wait to read more! Very Happy smiley face

Michelle

Wed Jun 23, 2004 9:32 pm

This is a marvelous piece of writing! I am truly impressed! Not only that, I am so very anxious to read more! This is the ultimate damsel in distress, handsome elves rushing to the rescue story, and ooooh, swoooon, all the best of Elvenkind just happened to be near. I'd put up with a bit of pain to be rescued by those four.

Your descriptions and imagery are lovely and deftly done. You draw the reader into the story easily and smoothly with the delightful characterization of your OFC, Mislyn. As a reader, I am rooting for her right from the start. She is extremely likeable and sweet, and I can't wait to find out more about her.

What else can I say? The pacing was well-done, starting off leisurely, followed by an upsurge of excitement and tension. It really drew me in and made me want to continue to read this story. I look forward to more!

Wed Jun 23, 2004 9:36 pm

On to chapter two.... Wow, this was another thoroughly riveting chapter! I could see the events unfold in my mind as clearly as a movie. All I can say is wow, wow, wow. A brilliant piece of work, and such an exciting tale. I cannot say enough good things. At first, I was worried that you were going to have Haldir be reluctant to intervene, but then I could see how you were handling it, each elf having his distinct personality. I love how Haldir sat down and helped Mislyn by letting her hang on to his arm. All the elves showed such extraordinary compassion, just the way I would envision.

As I said after the first chapter, to be rescued by these 4 elves is quite a fantasy, although the brutality of the attack/crime removes the romanticism from it. Still, the story grips me and makes me want to read more, no doubt about it. I also thought you did a particularly good job conveying the emotions of all involved, as well as Mislyn's obvious pain. I have my fingers crossed that Haldir is going to be her love interest (I bet that surprises you, lol). He certainly is well characterized in your writing, as are the other 3 elves. Great, wonderful, marvelous writing! I love it! And of course I am looking forward to reading more.

Thu Jun 24, 2004 7:42 am

I love the details of this mysterious Elf's life in the village, and how heart-rending was it to see her leave all her work behind?! I'm glad, from what i see in Chapter Two, that there are potentially decent Men as well as really evil and ignorant ones- how these new arrivals react to the other Men's crimes will be the big deciding factor!

I'm incredibly curious as to why an Elf is hiding out incognito among Men. I hope you will start filling in the blanks soon! She needs some major tlc and I hope the Elves especially can help her heal, both body and soul.

I love the varying reactions amongst the Elves! You've painted them as all very distinct personalities with distinct motivations for acting the way they do. I just loved Elrohir here- so gentle and caring! Sigh.

I really look forward to part 3. I hope She will get some justice for the outrage inflicted on her as well as some comfort!

Cheers,
Amy B.

Thu Jun 24, 2004 12:44 pm

And then they will know fear, and then they will know pain, and then they will know death??? Please?!? Heavy on the fear and pain?

Ok, ok, so i got into this quickly. A very nice beginning. Like the others have said, I'm liking the difference in the personalities. And very curious as to why she only speaks Westron and was disguising herself. Also impressed on the cringe factor, very descriptive.

Overall, I'm liking this a lot thus far, and really want to see more soon.

And a little birdie told me this was your first fanfic. Keep up the good work!

Fri Jun 25, 2004 8:09 pm

Vi,

I have finally read this, and hope to soon read Chapter 3. Excellent visual, albeit a terribly sad one of the poor elleth's handling by the humans. Such hatred to one who only seemed to show kindness. But what of their reasons? and Why does Mislyn hid her indenty? Such subtle and not so subtle questions draw the reader in. The elves seem powerful, and of course deliciously so, Elladan and Elrohir, and Legolas are so sure of their path, and yet Haldir, always cautious, thinking things prudently, but yet he too finds the situation too much.. What will happen now? Will the elves reliquish the mortals to the humans? or will they provide thier own punishment? An interesting question and I look forward to seeing the answer in the upcoming chapters. Your description and style is elegant, a testimony to the long years of writing you have vested in this art. Well done, and cheers... I look forward to more of this and anything else you wish to write.. a sincere fan...Fianna

Mon Jun 28, 2004 2:53 pm

This is beautifully written, and I find myself very curious to know what Mislyn was doing in a human town, teaching their children. I really loved the description of her room and the morning before everything started to go wrong for her. I'm not an OFC or a romance fan, but this is well above the quality of anything I've seen before on a similar theme. I particularly appreciated the fact that you didn't have the Men rape her, which would have (a) been too cliche'd and (b) set you up with canon problems regarding the tendancy of elves to die when raped. I was greatly relieved when that didn't happen Smile smiley face

I had a few, niggling little pedantic quibbles; (1) *mithril* needles? It would be like having a jar full of platinum needles in a schoolroom - it jumped out at me as being out of place. Copper or brass would be as easy to use and more likely.
(2) Elladan and Elrohir are Half-Elves, and there is no suggestion in any of the books that they are anything other than proud of the human side of their heritage. They ride out on errantry with the Rangers, and the heir of Isildur has been raised in their father's house for centuries... in light of this it didn't make sense to me that it should be Elladan who had a hatred for Men. If it's an important plot point, could it be given as a character trait to Haldir or Legolas? Or does more hinge on it than I am aware, and you're going to explain it better later?

That said, I liked the clear differences in character between the rescuers, and Haldir stood out for me with his insular, Lothlorien attitude of 'leave well enough alone'. It was nice to see that in him - it made him all the more believable.

Lovely writing and a really good start.

Marnie Smile smiley face

Thu Jul 01, 2004 10:26 pm

I'm really enjoying this story thus far! It's intriguing....all the mystery behind the elf, Mislyn. I have to disagree with Marnie about the mithril needles. They would be old, beautiful, precious and extremely rare. The reason why she made sure she had them. I could picture them!! They would slide easily through material and never break! But, I do agree about Elladan though.....what would have happened that would make him hate men?? That would be interesting to explain later in the story, eh? Smile smiley face

The parallel between the men torturing her to attempt to kill her simply because she's an elf and the same senseless stories that hit the evening news, is a sad one, yet very realistic! What Haldir did with the man in the end was the only thing that could be done. He would have never stopped. This story is wonderfully written and I just cannot wait for the rest! Very Happy smiley face

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