Reviews for "The Lost Ones"

Wed Jul 28, 2004 6:45 pm

So far so good! I like it because its believable and im hoping you keep with that!

The plot is plausible and your characters are in canon! The writing itself is good and it shows that you've proof read! THANK YOU! Very Happy smiley face

Please dont go crazy with this! Keep it sane and watch out for cliches! This will make a great fic if done right!

Wed Jul 28, 2004 7:14 pm

Thank you very much! I hope you continue to enjoy our story.

Cee

Fri Jul 30, 2004 10:56 pm

A little bit of LOTR with a touch of Dune.... Hmmm… This sounds PERFECT! Wave smiley face

I was completely hooked by your story. Everything seems to be so real... I've read it for almost four hours straight and I had a hard time to stopping reading it so I could go to work. You two captured the desert’s atmosphere so wonderfully that I can almost feel the annoyance for the lack of water, the discomfort of the intense heat and the insane never-ending dunes throughout the reading. Reading smiley face

There were a few passages that were a little bit confusing though and you should pay a closer attention to the punctuation and to the construction of some of the dialogues (sometimes we don’t know who is speaking, mainly in the first chapters). But this is no flame at all! If I hadn’t loved your story so much, I wouldn’t have wasted my time leaving a review or rating your wonderful fanfiction. Bunny smiley face

I think you two are awesome writers and this story rocks big time! Please, update soon before there is no fingernail left for me to bite in anxiety.

Kwannom

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Sat Jul 31, 2004 3:36 pm

Oh thank you so much! Actually the first few chapters we wrote and did not have a beta. since then we have found one and she is wonderful! thank you so much for your review, it certainly put a huge smile on my face, and I'm sure will do the same for Maeluiril as soon as she reads it.

Cee Very Happy smiley face

Tue Aug 17, 2004 5:37 am

wow this story is cool ,i got hooked on the first chapter,
poor hildar, wonders if she ganna be more than he can handel,lol Bounce smiley face

ok ,got me hooked when the next chapter?

Wed Aug 18, 2004 1:04 am

I'm completely addicted to this story! I agree with one of the previous reviews that made the comparison of LOTR and Dune. I see that as well. Everyone is definitely in character, and you follow a concise story line. I'm really anxious to see what happens next when Haldir confronts Sabiya. I hope to see this updated soon!!

Mon Aug 23, 2004 1:14 am

I'm glad Haldir and Sabiya are starting to work through their differences. I also hope that Orophin realizes his mistake before it causes any more damage. I know he's supposed to be the more sensitive one out of the brothers, but he's going to far, even without the influence.

Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:42 pm

Another chapter, yay! Wave smiley face

Unfortunately, it ended too soon... A few more lines and the end of this chapter would be much more interesting hee hee Fallen angel smiley face

Mon Aug 23, 2004 8:19 pm

hehe sorry for the shortnes. Both my coauthor and myself have been having some difficulty with writers block. To add to this I am moving within the next few weeks so my mind has been elsewhere. Thanks so much for all your feedback it really helps us keep going.

Tue Oct 12, 2004 2:21 am

Cee,
I had been following this from Haldir Lovers, but I obviously missed this chapter in the chaos that has been my life of late. Now that my divorce is final, I can get back to the important things.....like thuddable Haldir fanfiction. Very Happy smiley face

Another great chapter! I don't see how how they will work this out, short of him taking her people back with him, but I can't see them giving up their way of life, albeit hard. Please update soon. This is definitely a unique story.

Talasi

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