Reviews for "Before I go to sleep"

Fri Dec 03, 2004 10:20 pm

This is a really great start. I like the simplicity of the atmosphere. It's very hobbit-y Laughing smiley face

I know it's hard to explain the backstory of an OC in an interesting way. I think you did an admirable job. My only concern is that the switch from present tense to past tense between the Prologue and Chapter 1 was slightly confusing. I did notice a few formatting errors that you may want to take a look at. Towards the end of the Prologue, you have a Beta comment in parenthesis. Also, you have the beginning quotation marks at the bottom of the line, rather than the top. I look forward to seeing where this fic is going. If the Prologue is any hint of the ending, then I believe I will not be disappointed. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading Laughing smiley face