Reviews for "Mirkwood and Beyond"

Tue Dec 07, 2004 6:45 pm

I'm not sure if this is a problem with transferring text onto this site from another application or not, but there are a lot of very odd errors throughout the piece that make it quite difficult to read in parts. They don't look like typos or spelling errors to me, more like something hasn't quite translated properly. I'm not mentioning this to be horrid or nasty, btw, as I know how irritating it can be when you put work into something and some technical gremlins somewhere work against you. Wink smiley face

Jess
(Just trying to be helpful)

Tue Dec 07, 2004 8:39 pm

The writing style is fluid and chatty, certainly easy to become involved with. I'm a little confused about the point, though. Is this a pwp, or is there a complicated plot going on? At times, the story seemed to be setting itself up for a free-for-all shagfest (which I have no problem with), but then it frustratingly sidled away from the hoped-for "good parts" and just lapsed back into rambles. It might be good to let the readers know from the outset what to expect. I'll check back periodically and see how this story develops. Smile smiley face

Wed Dec 08, 2004 3:36 am

That chapter was copied and pasted from AFF--A BIG MISTAKE! And I was in such a hurry to get to something else that I didnt take the time to proof-read (stupid me!)
thanks SO MUCH for alerting me!
Mary

SpaceWeavil said
> I'm not sure if this is a problem with transferring text onto this site from another application or not, but there are a lot of very odd errors throughout the piece that make it quite difficult to read in parts. They don't look like typos or spelling errors to me, more like something hasn't quite translated properly. I'm not mentioning this to be horrid or nasty, btw, as I know how irritating it can be when you put work into something and some technical gremlins somewhere work against you. Wink smiley face

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> Jess
> (Just trying to be helpful) Surprised smiley face

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Fri Dec 10, 2004 8:43 pm

Mary & Mal,
I wanted to let you know that I found this chapter highly entertaining and enjoyable to read. I love the tongue-in-cheek humor of the story, especially evident when the reader is in Mary's point of view. (Mal seems a bit more serious). Your disparate personalities definitely emerge, and the contrast really makes this duel storyline work very well.

I admit I was surprised to read that Mal seems to have softened considerably toward good old Thaladir. That's an interesting development. Naturally I love the addition of Elrohir, Elladan, and Haldir to the story. *g* One detail that I *especially* loved was the part about how elves detect a shimmering emanation from human bodies. That was very creative and gave me a little shiver. Another thing I like very much is your concept of a bold Haldir. And of course there is dear Thaladir, whose arse has been starched to the finest stiffness. LOL. Excellent job you two!

Fri Dec 10, 2004 8:47 pm

Mary & Mal,
This second chapter was beautifully written and most engaging. I like the switch-back-and-forth routine, each following such different storylines. I am intrigued by Thaladir's experiments with Mal. He seems to be acting most bizarrely. I liked when Haldir & the twins showed up and flirted with Mal, to Thaladir's annoyance. I am sure Thaladir does not hate Mary, btw. Oh, and the traveling elf minstrel part of it is also intriguing; I am sensing a mystery there. Beautiful descriptions of setting, forest, birds, etc. A well done, interesting, and sexy chapter that I very much enjoyed reading. Good job (as always!) You are both so talented!

Tue Feb 08, 2005 5:59 pm

Mary & Mal,
Those twins are definitely delicious. Very enjoyable to read. Just love Thaladir. Excellent. I love the humor and the different perspectives you each provide.

Talasi

Tue Feb 22, 2005 4:08 pm

Another wonderful chapter. I like the carriages. I never would have thought at first, but Thaladir is definitely growing on me. As always, Thandruil is utterly studly!!! The running commentary by the ladies is great. More!!

Talasi
*who always thuds for Haldir, but Thandruil is definitely growing on her*

Mon Mar 14, 2005 5:35 pm

*THUD* "I would have you speak of your desire and tell me in what way you wish to be taken." *DIES*

I just love the way Mary is messing with Thaladir *snicker* I was seriously laughing out loud.

Bravo, ladies!!! Wave smiley face

Talasi

Tue Mar 29, 2005 8:32 pm

Another most excellent chapter, ladies. Can't wait to see more Soon smiley face

Talasi

Wed Jul 06, 2005 8:14 pm

ok ,it was getting kinda, i gesse you say dry inbetween chapters for a wile , but you both have manged to turn that a round. yo both have done well writtng this story, and i look forward to the next chapters
as for this chapeter was very injoyable , *wonders what in store for thos two with Lord Celiborn Wink smiley face

Please up date soon!!!!!!!
Tess

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