Reviews for "Sacrifices"

Tue Dec 21, 2004 2:22 am

very good, i like the descriptions you use.
question though, is this a beginning to a story or is the whole thing because i think it would be a great beginning.

*athanya

Wed Dec 22, 2004 8:15 pm

chapter 3:

very nice, i only dislike how they talk to harshly of eomer, he's a good guy, of course he's all cold... his uncle and cousin were just slaughtered in battle and now his sister is leaving him too. what does lothiriel expect, laughs and smiles?

*athanya

Sun Jan 09, 2005 7:39 am

I like your story - tremendously; and I am looking forward to seeing it evolve .... however, I think that you should take your time to re-read it. In places it is somewhat confusing to the reader - for instance the sudden introduction of the women Ceirwy in the last chapter... good plot point, and it will be very interesting to follow that lead .... and then there is the other matter; your spelling - I suppose that you mean 'fiancé' and not 'finance'??? Are you a native speaker? Perhaps a beta-reader would be a good idea??

Good luck - it is a fine story, and as I said - I am looking forward to seeing it evolve; I will be one of your permanent readers!

Frigg

Fri Jan 14, 2005 4:45 am

This is getting better and better ---- I am really looking forward to the continuation. You are still sometimes too eager to get the words down on paper - I know the feeling; you have all these ideas and just want to convey them to others and thus could perhaps profit from reading your stuff just one more time, but it is good!

Besides, you almost gave me a heart attack letting our darling Éomer become such a brute!! Very Happy smiley face

Luckily you changed him back again ..... the drunken fool! Lol. Frigg

Tue Jan 18, 2005 11:05 am

AH! he's been hit! omg, i loved how you described his awe of the ocean, inspiring! he was hit oh my lord he was hit. i can't wait to read more, this is getting so good.

*athanya

ps: you might want to clean up the spelling and wording a little bit. but i love it sooo much.

Wed Jan 26, 2005 6:19 am

Jeez, you are moving fast, aren't you. This is very good! I like it!

Fri Jan 28, 2005 7:25 am

Hi, you - I read it again - the entire story ----- and while I still think it is good, there are loose ends here and there ..... e.g. how did the dead come to life? Plot please. Hmmm - Love, Frigg

Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:45 pm

LOVE! that really is all i can say at this point...
*athanya

Mon Feb 14, 2005 4:07 pm

good story, good character development, good everything! Smile smiley face

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