Reviews for "A Rohan Ghost Story"
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krazykataave
Joined: 17 Dec 2004
Reviews: 127
Location: Immortalized by John Denver
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Mon Jan 03, 2005 10:34 am
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For English not being a first language you did well writing it. I noticed a few verb tense disagreements but that is easy to do writing in english from another language. I honestly don't know how people can learn english if it is not their first language - it's confusing for us english speakers! Kudos to you!
I liked the opening paragraph, the "clear but stormy" sets up nicely for the events to come. I'm assuming that you are writing based on the movie versions of the LOTR because there seems to be a few facts that don't check out in the books.
Very descriptive writing style, which is nice to read.
Thanks for posting it. I look forward to reading more soon.
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Last edited by krazykataave on Thu Jan 06, 2005 4:11 pm |
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ghettoelleth
Joined: 06 Nov 2004
Reviews: 378
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Mon Jan 03, 2005 12:24 pm
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Wow Kat, I am thoroughly impressed by your skill as an esl writer, of Tolkien for heaven's sake. I would have taken the easy road and started with dr seuss or something. You should be very proud of your accomplishment. Oh, and you do Rohan as well, I can't do that. It's a lovely story, well written, you've quite a mastery for the speech. I was wondering if you have your stories beta'd? That might help cut down on the run on sentences and extended paragraphs. Just a suggestion to make writing easier on you. Otherwise, great job.
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ZeeDrippyVessel
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 95
Location: deep south
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Wed Jan 05, 2005 5:21 pm
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I agree here. There is a wonderful accomplishment for a non-English speaker. The premise is intriguing and I want more.
However, I too suggest that you seek out a native English speaking beta. The long, run on sentences and paragraph structure make this difficult to follow. |
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Katzilla
Joined: 29 Sep 2004
Reviews: 6
Location: Berlin
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Mon Jan 10, 2005 2:36 am
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krazykataave; ghettoelleth; ZeeDrippyVessel:
Thank you very much for your insights and praise. Since this was my first LotR-fiction, which I kind of wrote in a writing frenzy, I didn't have really the time to go back and restructure it or really look for mistakes, which I KNOW are there. Yes, I *am* definitely planning to have it betaed one of these days.
Thank you for your suggestions, and I'm looking forward to maybe hearing from you again! |
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