Reviews for "Mercy"

Wed Feb 09, 2005 2:10 pm

an intresting twist on the story - will there be any further chapters?

Wed Feb 09, 2005 5:05 pm

They are both so very CLUELESS!
Hmmm. The only thing I can think of that you could improve is that they seem to speak way too plainly of their feelings. RL people would be a tad more subtle even if it is a cleaning of slates kind of thing. We just don't bare ourselves like that.

Well, I suppose very stressed people may throw caution to hell sometimes.

I am properly impressed by your characterization. Bravo.

Thu Mar 17, 2005 1:21 am

I like this twist, certainly not the usual kind of thing. Is the story going to be contined? I hope you write more. I'd like to see your take on how these two people in particular would remedy their marriage. This could potentially be a many chaptered story, including glimpses of what effect a child has, and what that child sees of its parents marriage while growing up. You have an intriguing perspective. Please write more. Even if you don't, Props!

Sun Feb 05, 2006 2:37 pm

Please continue the story. You give the reader a chance to review the own life, realizing what they shall do about their own relation ships. Please continue!

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