Reviews for "Paradox of the Fourth Age"

Thu Jun 30, 2005 9:36 pm

This was incredible! I'm glad Glorfindel and Elrohir both finally fessed up about their feelings. This is so sad and so emotional. So very well done. The lack of dawn was ominous.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Ellie

Tue Jul 12, 2005 12:42 am

Wow Al

Another excellent, emotionally intense chapter.
The flashback is very touching (I particularly love Indil's line in the end of the flashback Crying or Very sad smiley face

).

Looking forward to reading the next part.

Binka

PS. Sorry it took me so long to read and review this.

Wed Jul 13, 2005 8:22 pm

You know, the 'smut' scene in this is so passionate and sweet when I re-read it after re-reading These boots.... It just goes to show what a great range of skill you have in the fine art of writing delicious smut. Smile smiley face

But I love this whole chapter, not just the smut. The flashback is just too sad..."she'll never be in ME..." well, she was wrong there! And it's a really scary flashback given what we know is going to happen.

And all the angst caused by her departure, worrying about her in ME, worrying about what will happen if she survives...there just is nothing good for them to wish for here. I particularly like the conversation with Thranduil's wife. Great chapter! I am sooo sorry to be so far behind in reviews. Surprised smiley face

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Sun Jul 31, 2005 3:29 pm

There is so much to this story and this line is just one example: One slim gold band was all that would remain of this day. Just as one band of gold was the reason she was returning. I love that. There is so much meaning and emotion tied up in that one line. I also loved the fact that this chapter starts with the birth of Laureanna and ends with her loss/a sort of rebirth. I really liked her entrance into Middle Earth. Scary!

And the angst! We have already talked about how I love the angst! Great chapter--now write the next one fast because now that she is in M-e, I am dying to know what happens next.

Sun Jul 31, 2005 4:46 pm

I'll have you know I sniffled my way through the whole chapter!!!! And what ellisk said, one slim band of gold!!! Beautiful!!! And now for the rest of the story.....(please?!).

Mon Aug 01, 2005 2:23 am

To quote Gandalf We come to it at last.
Laureanna is in M-E... and she's going to try to change its fate. I do hope she will be strong enough.

Thank you, Al, your story is breathtaking.

Sun Aug 07, 2005 12:59 am

Hello

I spent most of yesterday shirking responsibility and reading this story. Absolutely enthralling. I must admit I almost gave up during the wholesale slaughter at the beginning because it was so awful seeing our favourites sacrifice themselves for nought. But I persevered and was rewarded with a fabulous read.

I love that it’s been such a slow and detailed build up to Laurëanna’s quest. Everyone is involved and portrayed beautifully. Galadriel is the gem she should be and I like the girly stuff between Indil, Celebrian and, er, I forget the name of Mrs Thranduil. Glorfindel and Indil? Just gorgeous, especially their courtship and when she fires up and actually yells at those well intentioned, but wayward boys. As for scrummy Elrohir ... mmmm. Laurëanna is so full of potential, goodwill and, I expect, latent talent and ability.

You now have a new member of your fan club. I can’t wait to read what happens next. Go Laurëanna!

Cheers

Vicki

Fri Sep 02, 2005 5:12 am

Holy.... I have been doing a lot of reading this year and this is one of the most excellent stories I have read so far. From the first to the last word: I found it hard to put down. I just couldn't stop reading, I dragged the pages to every spot where I could sit down to read.

Your story telling technique is extremely good (pacing, plotlines and plotdevices all Thumb smiley face

). Within the prologue you strip away all beacons of hope, leaving the reader what on earth can happen to turn the tide. At the same time you build a new world (yes Valinor is Tolkien's creation, but what do we know about it regarding the visual?) in such splendid detail and in a very believable manner. That is just one of the things I liked. What I do like as well are the parallels in time, they might occur as simple flashback, but the layers Al.... they truly stunned me. Just wow... Shocked smiley face

You take your time to build up your characters and you don't step into the pitfall to make them too perfect (although your male elves... yum). I do care for every character, you write them with so much love and care. Each character has such an emotional impact on the story, your main character and.. the reader. And I do want to know more about every side character: as a writer you know what your readers need.

I ran out of tissues when I read how Laurëanna and Elrohir parted... dang that was good. *snif*

I told you before: you have a natural gift of writing and please keep on spoiling us with your excellent stories!

Bow smiley face

Fri Sep 16, 2005 8:34 am

I admit I found this particular sentence the most impactful:
Laurëanna could not stay separated from her parents for long, or they from her.

Now, she was alone in the most dangerous world, surrounded by people she could trust, but she couldn't be sure whether they'd trust her. Since the previous update I've been wondering just how Aragorn and other heroes of the past would react seeing Laurëanna and what she would tell them. She found herself in such a difficult situation; she had to convince them but she couldn't say much. By the way, I loved her interaction with Gimli. Also, I was glad to see Gandalf. He's IMO one of characters that makes me think that everything will be just fine.

Eagerly looking forward to the next chapter.

Binka

Fri Sep 16, 2005 10:31 am

Made me want to go hug my daughter (and wife). Very accurate description of how a father feels, from that first contact to keeping boys away.

Love the rest of it too, just that part made me glaze up and wanted you to know.

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