Reviews for "Walls With Ears"

Fri Jul 08, 2005 6:11 am

I think it's very funny--the type of things brothers and sisters might joke about. I wonder if Eowyn is old enough to understand the innuendo. It seems not since she thinks about Eomer pulling her hair. I think this was very cute.

Fri Jul 08, 2005 10:10 am

It's a cute idea; I always like seeing our hero/ine's act like us normal folk. But I think you're right ... it's a tad rushed. It is perhaps the hardest thing to cram a story into 100 words without making it seem crammed.

Addendum: Much better! I think this now feels much less pieced together, and flows well. I liked that you added the character of the lady ... gave it interesting depth.

Fri Jul 08, 2005 1:16 pm

The first paragraph is great, I wouldn't change anything on it, but the last two seem a bit stilted and almost repetitious...But it is a very cute little vignette, little tweaking and you should be good to go. Your writing generally flows very nicely.

Sat Jul 09, 2005 8:30 pm

Yes! Much better! It has the flow that was missing before. I actually snickered out loud when I read it. And I agree with what Nancy said about the "lady", it gave a lot more depth without too many words. Good job!

So are you planning to do more drabbles with this one? You could have a lot of fun with Eowyn blackmailing Eomer...

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