Reviews for "A Brandybuck Turns Baggins"
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Viv
Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
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Fri Nov 14, 2003 3:16 pm
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Will there be more to this story? I've enjoyed it so far. The character feelings and reactions are very believable. And we know that these two are friends later on, so their anger and hurt here must have ended somewhere along the way. I hate to think of Frodo harboring such guilt over his own orphan status. Poor little one!
If you get a yen to make any edits, perhaps you would consider reformatting the first chapter? Those line-breaks make it sort of hard to read. And somewhere in chapter 2, I saw the word "nutrition", which, although it has middle-English roots, kind of sounds newish. Perhaps "nourishment" would sound more old-timey? |
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Last edited by Viv on Fri Nov 14, 2003 8:31 am |
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jodancingtree
Joined: 11 Jan 2004
Reviews: 8
Location: usa
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Sat Jan 10, 2004 8:05 pm
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| Very believable and true to character -- I'm looking forward to reading more of this! |
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queenoftheshire
Joined: 03 Dec 2003
Reviews: 19
Location: Catching Birds with a Pool Skimmer
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Wed Jan 14, 2004 8:38 pm
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I really have liked this story so far! In the accounts of FOTR I think the relationship between Merry and Frodo was kind of thrown to the wayside. One minute he's watching the house for Frodo to make sure other hobbits only take thier inheritance from Bilbo, then several chapters afterwards they meet up again and stay near Brandy Hall. I've never seen much interaction with Merry involved especially with Frodo.
Please add more soon! |
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Last edited by queenoftheshire on Wed Jan 14, 2004 8:45 pm |
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ExquisiteElf
Joined: 04 Aug 2005
Reviews: 8
Location: On the moon
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Thu Aug 25, 2005 9:59 pm
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I'm not usually one for hobbit fics, but yours made me want to read more. 
I think you had all the emotions right on, and Frodo and Merry were very believable.
Well written. Can hardly wait to read more! Update soon!
Cheers! |
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ExquisiteElf
Joined: 04 Aug 2005
Reviews: 8
Location: On the moon
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Thu Aug 25, 2005 10:01 pm
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ooh, guess not on the updates..I didn't realize how long ago this was posted Oops!  ops: |
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