Reviews for "The Flame Rises"
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Viv
Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
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Fri Nov 21, 2003 6:29 pm
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That's it? Just two chapters?! Please post more! This is delightful so far. I especially appreciate your author notes at the end, showing your care with the source material. Very respectful to the professor. Thank you. I also want to thank you for getting the adjectives/nouns right (e.g., Telerin vs. Teleri); so many authors don't. Kudos to you! But I think my favorite aspect of the story so far is the richness of her life. No days spent lounging on the divan pondering her own heady immortality. Nope, this gal washes clothes, grinds grain, makes herself useful. This is certainly true to what Tolkien wrote about elf lifestyles; I can't imagine that the princesses had it any different, really. Good call.
As far as the constructive crit bits go... there aren't many. Be on the lookout for anachronistic terms ("unprintable" sticks out in my memory; printing, as you note later on, isn't really going on at that time). Also, you mentioned the elf girls in Rivendell making lembas... wasn't that a Melian/Galadriel secret?
Oh, speaking of Galadriel: I love how you slipped in Celebrimbor's crush on the golden-haired one. How is it that she can make so many folks adore her? Ho. 
And one final nit to pick: In Chapter 2 you called Celebrimbor "Master Archival"... did you mean "Master Artificer"? Or does he do some record-keeping on the side?
What fun this story already is! I'm putting it on my Watched Stories list and can't wait for an update. |
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Maram68
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 114
Location: West from East
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Fri Dec 05, 2003 4:47 pm
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I must confess I do not read many stories outside the WOTR timeline, because I still haven't read the Silm ... still I am truly hooked here.
Lovely tale-telling, great OCs ... I can't wait for you to continue with this story!!!!
Thank you!
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ADionne
Joined: 31 Jan 2004
Reviews: 3
Location: Eastern USA
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Tue Mar 02, 2004 6:49 pm
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just found this story the other day, and i'm smitten. its by far, one of the better Tolkien fanfictions i've read yet.  i'm so glad someone out there is paying strict attention to details.
and here's where i get to threaten you- if you don't finish this, i'll be forced to track you down and hurt you  |
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snowdrop
Joined: 29 Oct 2004
Reviews: 32
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Sun Jan 23, 2005 11:12 pm
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wow. this is wonderful. not only do you present a brilliant account of Feanor's descendants, but the style and ideas tie in so beautifully, you had me almost believing this AU version is the real thing. wunnerful, captivating story---i WANT MORE!!!!!!!  |
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