Reviews for "Poems of Many"

Wed Dec 31, 2003 10:26 am

More please... I t is very good so far, please continue.

I love what I read so far, more please.

Happy New Year,

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Sun Jan 25, 2004 10:28 am

Were you going for a sestina (where certain lines are repeated in a pattern throughout different verses)? Because I noticed how you repeated lines like 'friend of elves, men and dwarves,' and also ended consecutive lines with the same word, like 'quest' or 'gardens.' If you meant to do this, you might want to make that clearer by using more repeated, significant lines; however, if you did not intend this repetition, then try to eliminate it. Aslo, try to stay focused on the character about whom you are writing. Did you notice that you ended your poem about Sam with 'Frodo, the great ring bearer'? Consider things like that next time. Not bad for your first try.

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