Reviews for "One Woman"

Sat Jan 03, 2004 12:18 am

Hehe! Great story! I loved it! Cool smiley face

Alkvingiel

Fri Apr 16, 2004 5:14 pm

Only 1 review? Guys if you don't like it just say so... that way I can get it off here. Confused smiley face

Tue Oct 19, 2004 4:15 am

This is interesting. And it has great potential. However, it could use some more work. For one thing, you need a space between the paragraphs. It is difficult to read in its present form. There are also numerous grammatical errors. A spell check and grammar check would help. You should also consider getting a beta. I did not think I needed one, but it will help your writing immensely. One last thing; your story needs tightening. There are places where it tends to ramble. As I said, it does have potential, and if you are willing to work on it, it could really be a nice story. Thank you for sharing, and please, continue writing.

Tue Oct 19, 2004 9:46 am

I would have to agree with Rous, and I too, think its good. Ask someone to beta for you, and I'm sure someone would be glad to help you out; everyone is very helpful here at the OSA so don't be discouraged. Keep writing. Wink smiley face

Your friendly elf,

Dark Elf Childe

Tue Oct 19, 2004 11:21 pm

I agree with both Rous and DarkElfChilde. Don't be discouraged it has great potential!!!! Keep writing!!!!

Your friendly Elf,

MaidenGreenleaf Very Happy smiley face

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