Reviews for "A Hero"

Wed Jun 28, 2006 1:33 pm

May I politely request that you have this story proofread again and repost it? I couldn't really enjoy reading it because of the many spelling, grammatical and punctuation mistakes. Particularly bothersome was the mispelling of Sauron's name as Souron.

As for the content I did get through, I think it was odd that Teylor of Harad identified himself by name to Merry and was so open and specific about under whose ordres he was kidnapping the Hobbit. I think it would be more in character for a minion of hte Dark Lord to give a false name or to say nothing at all to his captive.

If you plan to continue adding to this story I would be willing to beta any future chapters for you. I do like the AU where Merry is the Hobbit the Enemy is interested in. It looks like it can be a very good tale.

Edlyn

Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:41 pm

This is an interesting story and I think you have somewhat of a good start with it. I might suggest though that maybe you add more deatail to what you're writing because it seemed to read to fast. Mayeb expand a little bit more on the characters becuase right now they seemed a bit out of character. Maybe if you described their motives a little bit more, it might not seem that way, or if they are indeed out of character it would help you get them back into character.

Tue Jan 02, 2007 10:42 am

I like it! Please write more!

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