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BittenBuggy
Joined: 27 Dec 2003
Reviews: 93
Location: Busy Being the Queen Of Everything.. And Trying to Catch the Yoda-Copter
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Thu Mar 18, 2004 6:45 am
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| Oh... *tear* Ok, that’s a lie... *TearS* That was very poignant for something so short. It was very Tolkien-ish, very little dialogue and much description. Lovely sweetie. |
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sweetkisses
Joined: 17 Mar 2004
Reviews: 1
Location: Washington DC
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Fri Mar 19, 2004 6:46 pm
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| That was an amazing story. Short but beautiful and straight to the point. I would say that it seems as if tolkien wrote it himself. Anyways I loved it, and I encourage you to write more stories like those. |
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GoAwayLemebe
Joined: 02 Apr 2004
Reviews: 8
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Fri Apr 02, 2004 4:08 pm
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Well written but, how can I say this without being misconstrued?  ops:
It was well written, but it seemed very textbook. I did not get a sense of Orophin's wilting or a reason to why he continued to love her even after she left. If this is your first time writing, you did well. Just need to work on infusing your text with emotional content. |
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HisieLome
Joined: 17 Jan 2004
Reviews: 133
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Sat Apr 10, 2004 6:45 pm
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| That was very sad. Are you familiar with Tolkien's " Laws and Customs of Elves"? The tale did seem very canon in that an elf forever loves the one to which they are bonded and will fade if their love dies. This was well done. Please continue to write and thank you for all of your efforts. |
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Viv
Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
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Mon Apr 12, 2004 4:43 pm
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"To one accustomed to the lengthy and cerebral rituals of elven courtship, the eager and passionate advances of a mortal can be irresistible... So had it proven to be for Orophin of the Golden Wood." -- Poetic, wrenching, gorgeously high-styled and elven in tone.
There's so much good to say about this piece in general, but I want to applaud you for something in particular as well: a really strong beginning. Most fic writers drop the ball when it comes to the first words and sentences of a fic. You haven't. This piece is chock full of good writing. And (omg) you know how to use semicolons. I am so fangirling you. |
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aimless
Joined: 05 Feb 2004
Reviews: 36
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Sat Apr 17, 2004 10:55 pm
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That was so sad (sniffle) I loved that it was an Orophin story. There are far too few of them. Really well written and very emotional.
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Duchess
Joined: 25 Mar 2004
Reviews: 187
Location: North Carolina
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Sun May 02, 2004 1:09 pm
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| Oh, how sad! Very angsty there at the end with Orophin dying too but, sooo well written! Loved it, loved it, loved it!!! |
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ElflingImp
Joined: 14 Jul 2005
Reviews: 128
Location: Some where in Middle Earth
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Mon Nov 12, 2007 5:18 pm
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| Thia moved me and I don"t know why it is'nt rated higher it was excellent! |
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