Reviews for "The World that Was"
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sindohte
Joined: 14 May 2003
Reviews: 157
Location: Rubbing up against an Elf
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Fri Jun 27, 2003 9:24 pm
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I'm intrigued by your story so far. The beginning reminds me of Anne Rice's Interview with a Vampire. I look forward to seeing how things unfold. Nothing like Legolas sharing his memories of the past and the chance for a Legolas romance  Consider me happy. |
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Elentari
Joined: 13 May 2003
Reviews: 244
Location: Lost in elven dreams...
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Sat Jun 28, 2003 11:19 am
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The only flaw of this fic is that it's entirely too short. You have a very interesting style, leaving the ending up for the reader to decide, everything hinted and not said...
Although, from the reader's point of view, I should ask you to consider developing it a bit more. I reckon writing Legolas (at least writing well) is hard, more so in a place that we know not well (Valinor), but yet there were so many possibilities unchecked there... Do not be afraid to risk. After all, we're here to help you, right?
Because without more things happening, it's a bit hard to believe anyone would decide to simply stay in valinor forever (as was hinted) no matter how wonderful it might be. The girl ought to have a family, friends (we know she has a job already, and she was pretty good at it or else she would not get such a delicate work). One does not throw all of that out (not being an overly hormone-driven teenage, that is) just because that piece of heaven asked her to stay. The little bit of intimacy was missing -whatever it was that Legolas did or said that made her sure she had a chance, something to stay for.
Consider this a constructive criticism.
And I really did love the style. and descritptions. Can't tell that much about characterization 'cause it was brief, but well done.
I'll keep my eyes open for your next works. |
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Moralanqua
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 167
Location: Scotland
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Tue Apr 27, 2004 7:01 pm
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That was goood! Nicely done!
Hang on! Holy shnit!
Terri AND Viv? As in Viv the Llama?  |
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Viv
Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
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Sun May 16, 2004 9:32 pm
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Moralanqua said
> That was goood! Nicely done!
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> Hang on! Holy shnit!
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> Terri AND Viv? As in Viv the Llama?
Yep, the same. And that would also be the same Terriviv combo of "The Best Part" series, for those fine folks who read far too much smut. |
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Ariana
Joined: 30 Jan 2007
Reviews: 3
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Tue Jan 30, 2007 11:16 am
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This piece is so lovely. It is amazing how Terri and Viv can leave the reader anticipating with breathlessness, heart racing, always wanting more...
It has been some time. I do hope you will one day share more of this beautiful story!
Mel |
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