Live Journal FeedSince these were written originally as separate drabbles - I had reviews on each one before I compiled them into one collection. I didn't want to lose these reviews so I'm putting them here for my own sake. :0)
Reviews for ~ Seduction...Creation...Love...Loss...
** Evenstar 5 ~ Al, that really moved me. Well written drabble.
** Robinka ~ Very beautiful, mind-blowing, sad, impactful, reads like poetry... No, it is poetry actually. I'm impressed, Al
** Rhapsody ~ Oh my goodness Alassante! Fëanor's life, pains, loves and demise in just 200 words. To find these pieces of work on a day like this feels like a treasure to me. The visual details you are giving us, three Silmarils, three voices. The manner Fëanor hallows them and his slow downfall (we sometimes forget that this alone happened throughout ages).. just superb!
** Viv ~ Oooooh. Creepy and elegant. How clever to give a voice to those rocks, and to make that voice so seductive. I can almost see how easy it was for Feanor to fall. Lovely bit, you.
** LadyofRohan ~ Very nice. You can hear the stones whispering, almost hissing, driving Feanor mad.
** Rous ~ Uh, wow. Okay, that is all I have. Just...WOW! Very artfully dones. Not too little, not too much. And, a true drabble, the whole story, in one shot. Truly, a wonderful piece. Thank you for sharing.
Reviews for ~ Darkness Falls in the Thousand Caves
** Ghettoelleth ~You don't get anymore spot on than this. Wow, I'm amazed at how close you've come. Arrogant, unrepentant for the things he's done wrong, all his regrets revolving around missing out on the silmarils rather than on his actions. Amazing job Shmoo, simply amazing. I think of all your leaps and bounds, this piece shows such an incredible growth on your part as an author. I'm still speechless at the stunning rate in which you've managed to develop not only from a mechanical aspect but your style and your ability to focus your creativity have gone from junior high to graduate school in a few months. I hope the beatings were worth it dear.
** RobinKa ~ son of the treacherous Beren
This line thrilled me in particular because I've never seen Beren a traitor. Yet, your drabble shows another point of view. And it shows it in a brilliant way.
I know I sound fangirly stupid here, but do you have more of these double drabbles? Can I have a subscription? I think the best stories are those that can pull a reader by the collar and say, "Look, this is what I really want to tell you." You have this great ability to leave your readers with their jaws dropped. I told Ghetto that sometimes words fail me and I really don't know what to say. That is how I feel now, so forgive me a silly review. This story is magnificent.
** Haleth ~ This story gets an amazing amount across in very few words. Celegorm is perfectly portrayed. The last line is especially poignant.
** Rhapsody ~ Oh Alassante, it feels now that every time I come across a story written by you, it shines like a silmaril. It holds so much and this one is written so masterfully that it tickles my muse, makes me want to fetch Tolkien's books and satisfy my curiosity or the sudden need to re-read it.
In this double drabble you write about Dior showing off the heirloom of the Fëanorians and Celegorm's reasoning is spot on. Boy I do sympathise with him and the remaining brothers. Just the fact that someone would show off something that has been a family heirloom, created with so much love, blood, sweat and tears and walking around with it so incredibly... arrogant. It makes me almost rip away the jewel myself. While I read this I could more then ever understand why Celegorm spoke so heatedly about getting them back every time.
Another thought that crossed my mind is this (I think you have seen me bringing it up before):
Its beauty ignites the fire of desire, which surges in my fëa. The ethereal flame seduces me to once again commit the unforgivable assassination of a fellow kinsman.
This makes me wonder about the very being of a Silmaril itself. Somehow I always thought they were beings of their own, calling out to vulnerable elves, enchanting them with what they want. Also, well then I really have to stop rambling this much, the corruption of Melkor shines through here so much. He wants the elves to kill their kin, so his corruption reaches far, further then I thought. So what Celegorm sees as a mistress, tickling his desire, makes me think Melkor knew exactly what Celegorm desired the most. Besides those shiney's.
** Ellie ~ HA! He missed it. very well done.
** Elliska ~ Great portrayal of a really sorrowful scene. More than anything else, the pursuit of the Silmarils always struck me as sad. I think you really capture that here with: " drive my blade deep into his chest. As triumph fills my heart, pain screams through my body and I look down in disbelief at the dark stain spreading quickly across my gut." And with the fact that, within reach of his brother, his dying efforts are still wasted on the Silmaril. Well done.
** Inglor ~ I'll echo the comments about Celegorm: Nailed Him. Showed the Feanorian rationalization perfectly. Still can't hate them as much as Turin though.
Very elegant in the strict definition of the word.
Reviews for ~ Blood Spilt
** Elliska ~ Excellent! A great portrayal of this topic--one that I think is so rarely written and so greatly in need of being explored. Expand on this Al, and you'll make my day even more. Great job!
** Neniel ~ The scene where young Elwing comes near to her dead father's body and then curses the ones who did this with a cruelty unlike her young age simply made me shiver! This drabble is very powerful in its imaging and wording, so all I can say is that it's worth all kinds of praise!
** SpaceWeavil ~ Lovely scene, and writing it mostly in present tense gave it a strong impact.
** Ghettoelleth ~ I don't know if I get to review this but I'm gonna. This is probably the first big girl thing I've seen you do since you read the Sil 4,000 times with or without me. I'm so glad that all those nights spent translating into ebonics went for something other than pr0n.
That said, this is exquisite. Perfectly balanced and flows like silk. Sad, tragic, beautiful portrayal. Wonderful work.
** RobinKa ~ Brilliant. It made me feel like I was there watching the scene.
** Rhapsody ~ *shiver* This imagery only:
They lay entwined, assassin embracing avenger, blades buried to the hilt still.
or
Caranthir, swarthiest jewel of Finwë, drifted on crimson currents, and weeping, I watch the light of Arda abandoning his eyes of onyx.
Curufin's perspective is incredibly well written and this piece has, as said above, an incredible flow. Oh And Elwing's actions, words... just wow Alassante!
** Viv ~ Oooh. Ouchie: kicking him while he's down. I like!
** Ellie ~ Wow! Well done. What a unique perspective, seeing Elwing's reaction.
Reviews for ~ Niëramilo
** Yavanie ~ OH YAY! the first! Nothing like a drabble to plunge you right into a character. And Nerdanel! Just how much anguish can one mother endure? "Fair as the stars, yet fierce tempered, Celegorm " okay that's my fave word picture. And all wrapped up in her anguish ('cause we know a male couldn't take it) she sees what he didn't - his finest creation : their sons. This is going to be an awesome collection!
** RobinKa ~ Oh I'm so glad you've posted this. I told you this before and I'm going to repeat that you created so complex and emotional portrayal of Nerdanel. She had to deal with such a terrible loss. No wonder that she asked Could you not see that your most remarkable creations were the ones we created together?
This is a real gem in a unique collection of work. I sweep a deep bow for you and Ghetto and thank you for exploring the fate of the Feanorians.
Binks
** Evenstar5 ~ Oh Al, That was so beautiful and heartbreaking. I loved it. Great job.
** Sulriel ~ I find Nerdanel to be an especially interesting character. To be strong enough to love Feanor, she must have been really something special, but I think the loss of so much, so many sons, (and the possibly more tragic, never-ending loss of Maglor) would be enough to break anyone.
** Rhapsody ~ I won't laugh, I only go hmmm... And you are welcome Alassante, just some tiny suggestions, but a very powerful double drabble.
It is heart wrenching for her to go through such an experience like this. And this is just the beginning... *shiver* I always assumed, maybe incorrectly, I don't know, that elven parents somehow could always sense the fëa of their children where ever they went. The fact that you write about this experience, what exactly goes through Nerdanel... you capture that extremely well. Fëanor is not longer around to share the anguish, so it feels like she gets the double load of it that well. Also her love for every one of her children shines through, it must have been such an incredible difficult decision not to go with them.
A very emotional piece of work!
Thanks so much for all the support I have received on each of these drabbles!!!!
