queenoftheshire

Joined: 03 Dec 2003 Posts: 607 Location: Catching Birds with a Pool Skimmer
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Posted: Thu Dec 18, 2003 8:17 pm Post subject: Beta needed for Humor plot |
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Before I go any further with this, ok a beta really is not completly nessesary just anyones opinion. Please read the first paragraph:
"Damn that hobbit!" Bill the Pony stamped his hooves against the sodden earth. "Put me out will you? Ha! Another thing to add to the 'Revenge List- I mean 'Affliction List' " Yes, it sounded stupid to keep of a list of things Samwise Gamgee had done to him, but soon he would have enough on this list to sue the fat hobbit's ass. Pulling a pencil from his saddle bag, the one his neglective owner forgot to take off, Bill wrote down yet another deed on the list, then reading it over. "Hmm. Yes, yes. These will get me at least the deed to this god forsaken hobbithole." He then pulled out a set of blueprints from his saddlebag as well. Yes, that sitting room will look very nice as a roller disco." He had been planning this for a very long time, but this was just a back up plan if the (insert mysterious, forshawdowing type music) other plans didn't work.
Please tell me if you liked it! _________________ ||Lex||Yoda||Sooker||
I'm coming for you..
I'm the shadow in the corner of the room.
I'm the reason you feel sick in the morning.
I'm the panic attack, at the end of the day.
I loved you.
And now you're gone. |
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