[Amsy]

hey all. i need a beta person thingy to make my story acceptable to the owner-person thingys... yes, this is how i write, be very very scared hehehehe.

yeah, sorry anywho. they yelled at me via email and yeah. so if someone could help me, thats would be absolutly great. pretty please, i'm very new to posting sories and it was very cutting to be told my story sucked, well it wasn't worded like that.

anywho, just whinging. dont mind me. so yeah, if someone could be really nice and help me, it would be greatly appreicated.

luving all, Amsy

[dolarabee]

Someone yelled at you... here, on this site? Who would that be?

Judging by your post, you don't seem to be that bothered about your spelling. It's one thing to rely on beta readers to catch things you might have missed or to help you in certain areas that aren't your strong suit - say, grammar or continuity - but quite another to just write without a care and lump everything on them to fix it up all pretty for you. Might work for professional authors and their paid editors (hehehehe ) but it doesn't work as well when the people doing the helping do it out of the kindness of their hearts and for free.

So what kind of author are you?

do.

[Ottis413]

I read your story, I thought it was pretty good, very good if that was your first work. my first work was a spelling and grammar nightmare. (Some might say the same for my latest works also.)
Being a very poor speller myself, I didn't notice your spelling too much.
I rely heavily on my spell-checker, http://www.megspace.com/computers/tinyspell/ works on forums, note pad, whatever. It's free, try it out. Makes your batas life a little less stressful also.

Keep up the good work.......

[NeumeIndil]

Hi Amsy. I just skimmed your first chapter, and while I can't promise to help long-term on a WIP, I'm willing to talk you through what's already posted or written. I have an advert in "the Beta Pool" topic in this thread (fourteen posts down on the first page. Look for the eye.). If you think I can be of help, drop me a PM and we can coordinate something.

[Viv]

Heya. Most of us have been told at one time or another that our stories suck: that's just something a ficwriter has to get used to. But you can make it better, and asking for a beta is a good way to start.

I confess I was concerned after reading your post here, because in the post you used optional grammar and punctutation. If the story was written that way, I wouldn't have been surprised that it got negative responses.

Happily, I read the opening paragraph to your fic and didn't find the same abuse of language. Yay! However, posting a please-beta-for-me request that uses such sloppy language might make it hard for you to find a competent beta. (No one would want to have to clean up that much!)

Like I said, I did read the first paragraph, and it was decent. Some minor grammar oopses, but a beta could clean those up in a jiffy. Of greater concern is that it starts out with a litany of physical description of your heroine. It's fantastic that you have a mental image of your OFC, but laying all that description out in paragraph 1 isn't going to stoke your reader's interest. Is there a way you can rework the intro so that you're dropping the reader right into the middle of action? I think that'd be a huge help, right off the bat.

Best luck.