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lissaselves



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 07, 2009 7:56 am    Post subject: Beta for light-hearted fic Reply with quote

Could someone spare the time to help me polish a fic?

Subject: A Very Proper Elf gains insight in some of the vices of mortals and learns a bit about himself in the process.

Book-verse, Gondor late 2nd age, some 5500 words. Has been through the mill at GoI, so shouldn't be in too bad shape. [Edit: Forgot to say: Mature-audience-only (due to some graphic language).]

Most of all, as an ESL I need help with the stilted, formal language of the Very Proper Elf. Second, due to a.o. much wonderful feedback, the story has taken a couple of unexpected turns on its way so a critical eye on the storyline and general progression of events, as well as on characterization, would be a great help.

Thank you!


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Viv
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 07, 2009 4:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Pffft. If it's the story I'm thinking it is, it don't need another set of eyes. It needs gushy fangirly reviews. Post it already! Very Happy
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lissaselves



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 07, 2009 4:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Viv wrote:
Pffft. If it's the story I'm thinking it is, it don't need another set of eyes. It needs gushy fangirly reviews. Post it already! Very Happy

lol - it IS that story. Thanks! Very Happy

But seriously, I'd feel better to have someone take a good, hard look at it. I didn't ask you, Viv, because I know how incredibly busy you are atm, so decided to try my luck here.
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Sulriel



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 07, 2009 7:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lissa, I agree with Viv. Don't torture yourself. Very Happy Go ahead and post it. *hugs*
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lissaselves



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 07, 2009 8:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sulriel wrote:
Lissa, I agree with Viv. Don't torture yourself. Very Happy Go ahead and post it. *hugs*

lol - are you guys ganging up on me? Laughing

Oh, alright then. You've both read this story, so I'll take your word for it and post it as is.
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