Reviews by SpaceWeavil

Time heals all wounds · Thu Feb 03, 2005 10:39 am

When I read the summary of this, I will admit I was wary, not because I have any qualms about reader darker stories, but because I've read similar pieces to this and they have been, in my experience, and excuse to use gratuitous rape / violence and to be as gross as is possible. So I am very glad that yours was not like this. Yes, it was harsh and quite horrible in bits, but the fact that it was so well written and you did not overly dwell on the torture etc, whilst still making it plain that what was happening was awful, kept this story from being a gore fest and nothing more. I liked your use of language. It sounded very 'orkish' in parts.

Stranger · Tue Feb 01, 2005 9:16 am

D'you know, I'm actually changing my mind about drabbles. I never really liked them or saw the point in them before, but having read really good ones like this, I can appreciate the skill going into them - to get such a good idea and insight into Legolas into so small a space. I love the idea of him feeling alienated after the events of the War of the Ring. Actually I'd love to see that expanded on as a fic as well, since it's such a good idea. Lovely writing though, and I hope you do more of these. Very Happy smiley face

And in the Darkness Bind Them: Vol I · Sun Jan 30, 2005 4:41 pm

KhazarKhum said
> A few comments.
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> Doesn't anyone notice his odd coloring? I would think that the gossip would be all over the place about the lord's "Ghost Childe" (a nice medieval description). I can't believe that albinos would be so common that no one at the Inn, or the merchant trader, or anyone else who saw him wouldn't have a good idea who this was.

That's more an issue in the next part, once he starts mingling with people of his own 'class' for want of a better word, who're more likely to come out and actually comment on it in front of him. I'm debating whether to rewrite the inn scene, however, as I was trying, when I wrote that, to hint that the innkeeper and all knew who he was, but were more interesting in seeing what was going on, rather than openly talking about it while he was there or letting on that he was the subject of gossip. Maybe that was clearer to me, because I know it's there. I'm certainly going to look over that section again and might do a bit of tweaking.

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> I wish there was a clearer description of the stick thing. It souinds like a nice, creepy critter; but all I seem to visualize is Jack Skellington naked. Shocked smiley face

I liked the vaguer sense of the creature and that was deliberate, but I appreciate the comment. I was just trying to be deliberately a bit vague because I didn't want it to turn into a 'cartoon monster' and also since, in my research, anything to do with these darker areas tends to be a bit fuzzier and indistinct. That mightn't have been as effective as I wanted, but I think I will stay with what I have for the moment. I am thinking about this still though so I might decide to change my mind and tweak a little later. Only thing is now I have the same mental image Shocked smiley face

Thanks

Thanks everyone who's reviewed. I know I have been whining about reviews for this, so all feedback and comments are much appreciated, seriously. I've got a few good ideas for the next part from this, and also I might alter a few little things in what I have so far. Still thinking about it. There won't be any changes to the storyline, however. If I do change it, it will be a case of inserting a few extra sentences and bits of description, so it shouldn't affect the story from now on or make it confusing.

Once again, many thanks all

Interrupted Journeys: Part Three--Journeys Begin · Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:00 am

I think this is the sweetest 'little Legolas' story I've read so far. He's so cute without being sickly sweet, and his behaviour's so realistic for a child. I also love the way you write Thranduil. His nobility comes across so strongly in your writing, and you bring it across just with his dialogue and small bits of description rather than thrusting the point forward, which I admire greatly. I understand that it might be a while before this is updated and so I shan't nag about updates, but please update soon Very Happy smiley face

Seriously, I am very much looking forward to reading more of this, since the writing alone is such a joy to read.

Arwen's Memories · Wed Jan 26, 2005 10:24 am

I see what you mean about the hankies. This is a really uncomfortable fic, in the best possible sense. It's so heartbreaking since it does touch on all the stuff Elrond would be going through, yet probably saying nothing about, and the fact that Arwen can see how her decision is affecting him and knows he will be hurt, but also has to balance this with following her own destiny just makes it doubly sad. I think you captured the emotions here ably. Loved it, thanks. Very Happy smiley face

Here You Cannot Leave Me · Tue Jan 25, 2005 9:27 pm

Nice poem. The metre's consistant and nicely flowing, and the rhymes don't sound forced, (those being my two usual complaints concerning poetry Twisted Evil smiley face

). As for subject, I reckon you've nicely captured the feelings involved, and I'd look forward to seeing more of the same stuff from you (hint). Reckon you've got a talent for poetry Very Happy smiley face

Lord of the Glittering Harem · Tue Jan 25, 2005 8:37 pm

Aww. That is definitely sweet. Good to see Gimli get some action and glad to see Legolas set straight about dwarf women. Again, very funny. I actually expected this to be a serious piece, so by the end of the first paragraph I was caught by surprise, which made it even funnier.

Flags · Tue Jan 25, 2005 12:32 pm

I've never heard of an iris being called a flag before (they were just irises to me Cool smiley face

), so when I first read this I will admit I didn't get it, but having read the A/N it makes sense now, and I like the point of it. Reminds me a little of 'The Soldier' by Rupert Brooke, so to agree with Haleth, I think Tolkien would have approved of the sentiment in this. Very Happy smiley face

The Half Breeds · Tue Jan 25, 2005 11:28 am

Well, just from this opening I am really looking forward to seeing how the story progresses. The scene has been set very nicely, with great description and a little hint at the characters. You've opened up just enough questions to make me want to watch this and see what happens. I love the idea of using the Avari and ifnding out what happened to them, what they've been doing all those years Very Happy smiley face

The Trees Remember · Tue Jan 25, 2005 9:37 am

I think this is my favourite chapter so far to be honest (chapter 8 that is). I'm liking the new details you're giving about Elaneth, and the little hints about her character. From this chapter, I'm really interested now in what she's *not* giving away, and I particularly liked the scene with Haldir - was it me or was there a little connection there? Twisted Evil smiley face

Through his arrogance and her defensiveness, I thought I could see a potential mutual liking. (I know how awkward that sentence sounds, but I can't think how to say what I mean. Hopefully you'll understand me from that.)

Anyway, another bloomin' cliffhanger! Evil or Very Mad smiley face

(actually I love chapters that end that way). I usually never do this in reviews but I am going to beg - please update soon!!! I'm starting to feel fangirly about this story. Very Happy smiley face

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