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The First Age of the Sun: Triumph (R)
by inglor.
Chapters [6]
Reviews [20]
Warnings [Warfare, character death, adult situations]
Mon Feb 28, 2005 4:16 pm
Inglor:

You managed to give a real "First Age" feel to the setting and dialogue. Artanis, as always, a strong and opinionated woman! (I mean that she is a strong woman!) I love your Artanis (least of all for making Beleg into a ball of ravishing elvish lust.) Imagine her sticking Nenya under your nose in the Third Age.

I liked the parting of Amarie and Finrod and the silver betrothal band. (I presume worn on the correct hand and the correct finger...) I only wish there were some more angst in their parting. Amarie did not even look back at Finrod--the man she would have spent eternity with. (sigh) I tend to think betrothal is a VERY big step in elves' lives, so a little bit more on the dialogue, please? Then again, maybe she finally, in her heart, knew Finrod was a jerk and then was really ticked off at him and "dumped" him! LOL! Laughing smiley face

As for the alliteration: Findarato Finrod Finarfinion! WOW! Only a real Silm nut could read that without flinching or head-scratching!

Finally, I love the allusion to stars. They are First Agers--you NEED to mention the stars!

Looking forward to seeing where this goes... Very Happy smiley face
 

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Last edited by Eruanna on Mon Feb 28, 2005 9:46 pm
 
Once in a Fair Green Country... (PG)
by SpaceWeavil.
Chapters [5]
Reviews [19]
Thu Feb 24, 2005 6:41 pm
Weavil:

With so much Third Age information we have, it is hard to imagine anything taking place in the First Age. Bravo for tackling the challenge. I love you interweaving the Valar into the story. (I am a Silm fan! Wink smiley face )

I LOVE your command of language! You really use words that draw the mind's eye...

This challenge is so unique that I am looking forward to its progress and conclusion. Olorin/Mithrandir....so rarely a topic of love stories. Most fic is Legomances and Haldimance, to which I plead guilty... Laughing smiley face

Looking for more!

--Eruanna
 
 
Haldir's First Love (NC-17)
by LoriAnne.
Chapters [10]
Reviews [4]
Warnings [OFC describes her rape in ch6 -- also graphic sex]
Sun Jan 16, 2005 3:46 pm
Mae govannen! So nice to see another writer deal with the three brothers of Lorien! ( I am an unabashed Haldir fan!)

"First love?" This leads me to believe that there will me more to steal his heart!

I was wondering if the use of the name of the OFC was a little bit "mary Sue-ish?" Not to worry, I have had some people warn me of that in MY writing!

I am still workin on my first fic myself. Like yours, my Hal is a sweetie, very old (a First Age baby) and filled with the burden of memory and sorrow.

--Eruanna
 
 
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